NEW - Lethal Lyrics (UNDONE)

[Solace]

Verse 1 is a slightly edited form of my other topic "Random Shit"

[Verse 1]
My lyrical patterns at just fatal to the average,
They're lethal to the weak, attack you like a savage,
Through this madness, a quick mad diss,
Specialized tactics, finish you and that's it,
So give me the mic, just pass it and I'll be rapping,
I'm usually rapid, especially when I'm jacking,
Talent's what you're lacking, look at my back bitch,
Scars of the knives from all of my friends backstabbing,
Fuck with me and prepare to get your asskicked,
A prepubescent's bars beating all of your track shit,
I bet I can make better music when I'm crapping,
Rap is a back flip, and I'm just doing gymnastics.

[Chorus]
I beat the best, abilities to turn beasts to pets,
Lines built beautifully, just give me any requests,
Power more of a mystery than the possessed,
Subliminally, I can make you feel depressed,
Just quiet down, if you want to hear the rest.

[Verse 2]
*Undone*

[Chorus]

[MC Anonymous]

Your best work so far.

[Requiem]

that was really good man. ur best verse by far, the rhyme scheme was complex, and the lines were sick. great content, i have to say great job
u should so record that

[Solace]

Your best work so far.

Thanks man!

that was really good man. ur best verse by far, the rhyme scheme was complex, and the lines were sick. great content, i have to say great job
u should so record that

Maybe i will Thanks, im glad you liked it

[SajN]

My lyrical patterns at just fatal to the average,
They're lethal to the weak, attack you like a savage,
Through this madness, a quick mad diss,
Specialized tactics, finish you and that's it,

Loving it! All lines were dope, and the flow was there.
Nothing more to say about this.

So give me the mic, just pass it and I'll be rapping,
I'm usually rapid, especially when I'm jacking,
Talent's what you're lacking, look at my back bitch,
Scars of the knives from all of my friends backstabbing,

The first three lines were also good. The last one... I don't know. Maybe it's just me, but I fell off. The line was also good, but I fell of the flow. Or it seemed like the flow changed. I don't know if that was your intention though,

Fuck with me and prepare to get your asskicked,
A prepubescent's bars beating all of your track shit,
I bet I can make better music when I'm crapping,
Rap is a back flip, and I'm just doing gymnastics.

Now this was also nice! In this I had the flow that I got reading the sentence before these 4 bars.

[Chorus]
I beat the best, abilities to turn beasts to pets,
Lines built beautifully, just give me any requests,
Power more of a mystery than the possessed,
Subliminally, I can make you feel depressed,
Just quiet down, if you want to hear the rest.

The bolded part. It just didn't seemed like it fitted in there. But the rest was good.

[Verse 2]
*Undone*
[Chorus]

This was just wack! NO flow! NO rhyming! And NOTHING else, except for crap!
Sorry, but I liked the 1st verse better.

[James R.]

You've stepped your game up. God damn Ima have to drop smtn to make sure nobody forgets about lil ol' James R

Seriously though this is probably the best thing I've seen from you. The rhyme scheme was dope and the content was spot on. Great job man. Don't lose your fire!

[Solace]

My lyrical patterns at just fatal to the average,
They're lethal to the weak, attack you like a savage,
Through this madness, a quick mad diss,
Specialized tactics, finish you and that's it,

Loving it! All lines were dope, and the flow was there.
Nothing more to say about this.

So give me the mic, just pass it and I'll be rapping,
I'm usually rapid, especially when I'm jacking,
Talent's what you're lacking, look at my back bitch,
Scars of the knives from all of my friends backstabbing,

The first three lines were also good. The last one... I don't know. Maybe it's just me, but I fell off. The line was also good, but I fell of the flow. Or it seemed like the flow changed. I don't know if that was your intention though,

Fuck with me and prepare to get your asskicked,
A prepubescent's bars beating all of your track shit,
I bet I can make better music when I'm crapping,
Rap is a back flip, and I'm just doing gymnastics.

Now this was also nice! In this I had the flow that I got reading the sentence before these 4 bars.

[Chorus]
I beat the best, abilities to turn beasts to pets,
Lines built beautifully, just give me any requests,
Power more of a mystery than the possessed,
Subliminally, I can make you feel depressed,
Just quiet down, if you want to hear the rest.

The bolded part. It just didn't seemed like it fitted in there. But the rest was good.

[Verse 2]
*Undone*
[Chorus]

This was just wack! NO flow! NO rhyming! And NOTHING else, except for crap!
Sorry, but I liked the 1st verse better.

Thanks man, im glad you enjoyed it and thought i did well. Ill try to improve on that part on the chorus if im not lazy. Again, thanks for feeding.

You've stepped your game up. God damn Ima have to drop smtn to make sure nobody forgets about lil ol' James R

Seriously though this is probably the best thing I've seen from you. The rhyme scheme was dope and the content was spot on. Great job man. Don't lose your fire!

Thanks James, glad people can see improvement. I wonder how good Ill be when im 15 Dont worry, we'll always remember James R. There is no TR without James-R

Now have an Epiphany