Like yeast I rise

[Solace]

I honestly don't have the time to write every line with an every rhyme put it together, Like I never understood why you people couldn't read the goods, never! it's not a could I would should I fly into the universe where I could die cause look guy I don't shug knight I don't book write I don't look like the white freeway I'm the he say she say!!!great I am great any way I am we say he strayed from the path of land never spoke to the last of fans why can't you comprehend what I'm sayin like yo motha fucka I have no delay an I have no kleeshays water damned

How do yo u spell cleshay?

I have no idea how you spell it. Your the man with the college degree, you go tell me. And yes you do have the time, if you stopped complaining and wrote better instead of whining and making paragraphs that make no entire sense.

[Purple23Haze]

you should structure your lines instead of keeping them in paragraph form. It would make them a whole lot easier to read. With that said, your stuff is alright but very hard to follow.

For real Tom I didn't know
look yo I'm fukin the kittens so
please read O-ALL before postin taller
big baller

right

i dont get it lol

Thats probably becuasue you aint abstract

[Mr.Maximum]

i hate to be the 3rd or fouth person to say this but, i cant believ i just wasted time reading that..
i mean step your game up please

[Purple23Haze]

I didn't like it at all. Flow was non-existent, rhymes were basic as hell, I never know what you mean when you put things in quotes. Like is it wordplay? A metaphor? What the hell is it? I thought the entire thing was weak, but this line was by FAR the weakest.

Blow me like the breeze shhweee, you like should we?

I mean did you REALLY spell the breeze noise? You always look cooler when you use real words.

I put things in quotes for emphasis why is there a better way?

[Purple23Haze]

i hate to be the 3rd or fouth person to say this but, i cant believ i just wasted time reading that..
i mean step your game up please

I will step my game up and don't fret this is the best form of constructive criticism there is piss off a forum piss of one person you piss of a nation EM did it

[Kez]

you should structure your lines instead of keeping them in paragraph form. It would make them a whole lot easier to read. With that said, your stuff is alright but very hard to follow.

For real Tom I didn't know
look yo I'm fukin the kittens so
please read O-ALL before postin taller
big baller

right

i dont get it lol

Seemed pretty obvious to me: he's too busy having sex with his feline pets to find out the preferred layout for his writings.