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jus some shit i keyed up....

Postby spitz2 » Jan 20th, '09, 09:51

wanted to do sumthin different than my usual......
jumpin on a trampoline man it seems life goes by/
no matter how slow you go that time gon fly/
lookin at the sunset that sights so nice/
wish i could go through this twice, no lie/
seventeen never seen this shit comin/
lifes to short to get pissed at nothin/
but we human what we doin with all this anger n hate/
shit that i done went through made me tamer to date/
emotion be flowin we knowin these notions/
make poeple divide up but aint comprehended each quotient/
bout to be eighteen in march a great thing it starts/
as but a whole new slew of shit that'' make me depart/
from the way i wanna be honestly im nice dude/
that likes brew and jus kicks back and listens to tight tunes/
but people like to back stab make me ice my back fast/
jus stay the fuck outta my life n thats that/
so if i could have one wish i would be done with/
these dumb kids who pump fists who get me in dumb shit/
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Re: jus some shit i keyed up....

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 20th, '09, 09:56

it's good for your age... that means u got a ways to go but you're on the right path so don't quit
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: jus some shit i keyed up....

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 20th, '09, 09:59

spitz2 wrote:wanted to do sumthin different than my usual......
seventeen never seen this shit comin/
lifes to short to get pissed at nothin/
but we human what we doin with all this anger n hate/
shit that i done went through made me tamer to date/
emotion be flowin we knowin these notions/
make poeple divide up but aint comprehended each quotient/
so if i could have one wish i would be done with/
these dumb kids who pump fists who get me in dumb shit/


that's much better man , ,i liked these lines too they are sick and full of emotions .. flow was nice here ,, i told you , you got skills . use them,, good shit over here bro ,, keep writing ,, you got potential , , gd luck man.. keep it comming
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Re: jus some shit i keyed up....

Postby spitz2 » Jan 20th, '09, 10:11

yea i usually have problems with how i wanna write.....thats my main thing. i got so much shit in my head.....but i dont know which to put down, so sometimes my shit sounds jumbled up
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