Poetic...

[MC Anonymous]

Body folded, smolden in golden ore
broken sore, in trial for spoken lore
I open doors, victim of spiritual slave labor
bled with brave razors, cut with life's sabers
shaken, emotion pleases the entity
just so I can double my density
eyes flashes with pyro, sweat nitro
mind missile silo's explodes with psycho
chemicals release, I grit my teeth
fall on the floor in shame and rip my fleece
elevate with knowledge, look at the city
see the streets as veins that I took after with me
my heart pumps oil, skin turns to sand
pencil fused with hand, I am now one with land
I need you to please understand,
my heart now pumps to the rhythm of the waves
the system that she gave, let me rhyme with the brave.

[mcZu]

This right here is what I call hiphop, sick
Loved each bar, your style faded smoothly between each bar, plus you could feel the poetic vibe

[MC Anonymous]

This right here is what I call hiphop, sick
Loved each bar, your style faded smoothly between each bar, plus you could feel the poetic vibe

Thanks dude

[James R.]

mcZu put it very nicely. This is the heart and soul of hiphop.

[MC Anonymous]

mcZu put it very nicely. This is the heart and soul of hiphop.

Thanks dude

[Darkblade44431]

Honestly, i think a lot of your stuff is much too lyrical without the sense of it being enjoyable to listen to. Not that having good lyrics is bad, but tone down on the descriptions a bit possibly, that's just my opinion though.
But this was really good, had great hip hop feel like said earlier, nice lyrics too. I'd love to see it recorded.
And, i did a verse, idk, i think it sounds kinda unique O_O ..It's like, just continuous flow, there's pretty much no time to stop, it's not extremely fast, it's kinda hard to explain, but i'll show you what i mean what i can get it recorded. Anyways..so what do you think of that? j/w