L.O.V.E ( Story Telling )

[Slim Zaddy]

feedback would be apprecitaed ..
verse 1

You walk into the room looking fine as hell,
Catch everyone's eyes, mine as well,
Looking so hot, with that high class smell,
When i first saw u,i fumbled and my glass fell,
U knew wat u wanted, seduced me wit a sly ass spell.
I''l remember that dress till my last breath,
The menu was large, with vast spread,
But you are the one i wanted lasted.
So we got to talking and get acquainted,
You told me you sang, you wrote and you painted,
I told you i was a mc and you fainted,
Not 'coz i was a rapper, there was sumthin' in your drink,
Your girlfriend came to ur place wit me,i swear i saw her wink,
But i thought it would be in poor taste, so i didn't take the hint,
Went home, but i couldn't help but think,
About u,i saw ur face, wondered if u were okay,
I was about to leave the other day,
When I got a call from you starting with"Hey!
How are u?"I didn't know what to say,
Asked if u were fine, had the side effects passed away?
You said it was an allergic reaction to palisade,
I said cool, still wanna go out on a date,
You agreed, said u just couldn't wait,
It was the next night, I think,a Saturday,
I rushed 'coz i didn't want to be late.

chorus

this Is Z love story not a thug story,
Not just a champagne and caviar fuck story,
We all fall in and out of romance,
But i think when it comes to stayin' in, thugs have no chance.

verse 2

Reached your place you in a red overcoat,
Over a black dress that set off the sprinklers 'coz of the smoke,
We had shrimps and lobsters in tis new place, it gets my vote,
The food was good, we had dessert and then we rode,
Back to your house, you gave me a kiss that provoked,
My senses, my sensors were on overload,
Grabbed me and pulled me through ur bedroom door,
The rest was like a porno flick and so much more!
The next morning, we had breakfast in bed,
Made love again till i felt woozy in da head,
I took one look at you and then u sat up and said,
"Do u love me?" after i was dressed and was fed,
I said yes and for the first time our eyes, they just met,
Nothing needed to say,our feelings were felt.

chorus

this Is Z love story not a thug story,
Not just a champagne and caviar fuck story,
We all fall in and out of romance,
But i think when it comes to stayin' in, thugs have no chance.


verse 3

Six months later, we like peas in a pod,
I swore my love for you would never stop,
Even when i was out hustling on the block,
I could feel your heartbeat in mine when i would walk,
I thought of u when i would rap, even when i would talk,
So you can imagine my pain and my shock,
When i came in and saw him on top,
Rammin' in you so i shot his cock,
Blood all over you as u stare at my glock,
Eyes i can't understand, though i once thought that i got,
What they would say, now like hieroglyphics,
Can't get what they say,I was out for like two minutes,
Then u started to say shit but i was one of them cynics,
All i cared about was the bio and the physics,
Him on top and u below, How could u do tis to me u hoe?
After everything, all the love i show,is this the way the river flow?
You keep cryin', keep sayin' no,
But I ain't listenin',i think i'm gonna fuckin' blow,
So lover boy gets two mo,
Then i turn to u, u must be feelin' cold,
Shivering like a baby, I almost lose my hold,
But then I remember images of you fuckin,
Picture you blowin' and suckin,
And my rage takes over, now there's no ducking,
I squeeze the trigger and i commence bustin,
That's the last bitch i'll ever be trustin,
From now on, no emotion, only lickin' and thrustin,
But i kiss her dead body 'coz it was true love,
But i can't help it, curse of a true thug.

chorus

this Is Z love story not a thug story,
Not just a champagne and caviar fuck story,
We all fall in and out of romance,
But i think when it comes to stayin' in, thugs have no chance.
,

[spitz2]

nice shit man, way different than what i expected, gotta give props man.

[Ka0t1c]

But were the one i wanted lasted

confused about this line

[Slim Zaddy]

But were the one i wanted lasted

confused about this line

thanks man for checkin it , ya this line i fixed it , what i mean here is you are the one that i wanted lasted ,, ,, so she is what i want to last with me ,, nothing else . thanks man ,, for making me correcting it ..

nice shit man, way different than what i expected, gotta give props man.

thanks man glad that you liked it . so what you were expecting

[spitz2]

i was more expectin the usual love shit, like "saw u cross the room knew i wanted you/ i want you in my life im jus bein honest boo/" type shit.

[Slim Zaddy]

i was more expectin the usual love shit, like "saw u cross the room knew i wanted you/ i want you in my life im jus bein honest boo/" type shit.

aha man , ya i got ya , but i'm trying something different over here, cuz usual things is just usual .. .. ,, i'm waiting for your next veres , i want to you improve ,, gd luck bro ..

[James R.]

That was sick as shit man. Loved the story, loved the emotion of the last verse. Very different from what I normally read on here. Good job. Very very good job.

[Slim Zaddy]

That was sick as shit man. Loved the story, loved the emotion of the last verse. Very different from what I normally read on here. Good job. Very very good job.

thanks james .. much appreciated ,, glad you liked it that much

:worship: i loved this man, really really good

thanks man , but i think you're better than me in romantic pieces . i want to see some new staff from you , and thanks again for checking it out