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Postby mcZu » Jan 23rd, '09, 20:58

Remember

I’m an emcee, lyricist, writer, poet and an artist
I paint canvases clearer then a day without mist
My fist is eager to punch my pencil out of his ink
So I let my pen cry like the moon is up high and link
It with the missing pack of wolves call them Mozart
‘Cause the wolf gone, left the troop.........No chart
Could ever describe or visualize my mind state so far
Inside the scene I can see hip hop strapped to a poison IV
People are robbing the essence from this marvellous being
Hip hop lives trough me.........you can call me the catalyst
I’m maybe not the antagonist but an artist who takes risks
To another level, which defines creativeness.....facing this
Tremendous weight on my shoulders feeling like Mozilla Firefox
Having the whole world on my back you are micro, soft...locked
Behind my bars, even Scofield couldn’t break you out this river
Of flow flowing and going against the stream of time and shivers
When its minutes for midnight and your linking parks to the future
‘Cause we just need to cipher instead of sinking and risking to lose her
From left to right and vice versa, twice 16 verses, flipping and curses
Freestyle or pre-written, be wild and don’t let the beat be skipping
But no they just auto tune their voice like they need to pimp their ride
Those frequencies just tune out of normal sounding sounds.. so decide
Next time to just tune in to your natural voice box
And seek styles that fit you like two from the Lox...

Feedback appreciated.
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Re: Remember

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 23rd, '09, 21:30

Pretty sick man, I loved the wordplay (that I understood)
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Re: Remember

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 24th, '09, 13:17

wow man it's really sick ,, i think it's dope as fuck ,, really loved it ,, keep droppin :y: :b:
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Re: Remember

Postby mcZu » Jan 24th, '09, 21:32

Thanks to both of ya, appreciate you both took the time to read it :y:
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Re: Remember

Postby James R. » Jan 25th, '09, 01:36

Wow a ton of word play in here. Impressive. I liked it. Flowed pretty well, but not flawlessly when read acapella but it's all good. Overall it was sick. I'd say there was a little too much wordplay for people to catch all of it, but who cares about the ones people miss, it's the ones they catch that count and there's so many it's a guarantee.
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Re: Remember

Postby mcZu » Jan 25th, '09, 20:49

^Thanks bro, yeah it might be hard to catch all and the flow might be off at some points. But with the right beat it could be dope. Thanks again for checkking it out :y:
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