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Stiking Distance

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Stiking Distance

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 23rd, '09, 18:50

Death Fears The Men involved in my Experiment and now the Times Come
for me to Make Cash, Take That be gone with your Fake Ass I'm on my Grind Son

my swagger is Flamboyant on this Damn Voyage to the Fucking End
My Foes know how I Role I dedicate most of my life to Crushing Them

Some Sounds can't be Dumbed Down with any amount of persistant Flouridation
my Raps Hotter you must be drinking Tap Water like there's nothing More Amazing

I Go Hard when my Flow Starts so don't intentionally trigger this Detonation
it'll Nuke a Bitch cause um to Puke n Shit I bomb fools without Hesitation

this insane Fighter makes it Rain Fire untill no living being is Safe
too many are Enjoying being Poisoned but I'm not racing to my Grave

my lyrics are in my Skin Deeper than the thought of the Grim Reaper
back to the Business of Sickness I've got one shot it won't Sting Either

when I spit Mercury it's injected Verbally cuz I don't need you to Feel This
Constant Pain anybody can Promise Change if we don't know what the Deal Is

we Need to See the Streets as truly Free when we look to our once Blue Skies
when you Visualize the Individual Ties associated it's like a set of New Eyes
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Re: Stiking Distance

Postby mcZu » Jan 23rd, '09, 18:55

Great, flow on point, vocab is above average, multies are present and the overall wrap is sick :y:
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Re: Stiking Distance

Postby Arabian Shady » Jan 23rd, '09, 19:38

daym dude, that was pretty welll written, structure made it easy to read and flow was on lock ,the verse is as sick as usual, nothin to complain about :y:
classic shit
peace :b:


P.S: is "ROLE" actually meant to be written like that , isnt it supposed to be "roll" :unsure:
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We're all on the same page, Yet we're standing apart on different lines'
So when we face rage, Ya'll fake it and let THEM commit horrific crimes
50 years & going straight, Yet this performance aint worth your time,OUR
Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
"Front Page",Arabian Shady


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Re: Stiking Distance

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 23rd, '09, 20:12

isn't the title mean to say "striking distance" ? well, anyways

Some Sounds can't be Dumbed Down with any amount of persistant Flouridation
my Raps Hotter you must be drinking Tap Water like there's nothing More Amazing


that part was my fave.


this insane Fighter makes it Rain Fire untill no living being is Safe
too many are Enjoying being Poisoned but I'm not racing to my Grave


i didn't like this, i thought it was ur weakest line

overall a dope piece :rock:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Stiking Distance

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jan 23rd, '09, 22:22

I've always loved reading what you write. The vocab is always amazing, the flow always looks good, and its always packed with originality. I particularly loved the last two lines.

Always offer a good read, keep it up :y:
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Re: Stiking Distance

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 24th, '09, 13:28

wow long time i didn't see ya writing here bro , but i gotta tell you this shit is amazing i really loved it and i like your way of writing verses ,, lyrics and rhymes are so hot and to the point ,, keep it up man .. :y: :b: :b:
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Re: Stiking Distance

Postby James R. » Jan 24th, '09, 15:36

You never disappoint man. This was hot. Flow was on. Lyrics were on par with your usual shit so it's ill. I loved the whole thing man. Keep droppin.
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