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Looking At Me

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jan 16th, '09, 17:49

Okay, my first rap verse in a good while. I've been sticking to poetry and shit for a long time, and this is the first time I've tried rapping in like, two months maybe. I'm planning on continuing this, maybe. I just wanted to know what do you all think so far? Any good?

[Verse 1][Escape Artist]
Take a look into my eyes look through the lies and read my mind/
My oh my whats it like tell me please what do you find/
Can you see the sign my soul ain't fine/
I'mma kill all you motherfuckers if I don't get whats mine/
People see me all the time and wonder what the hell is wrong/
Whats with the fuckin' pants the Juggalo shit and whys your hair so long/
I don't fuckin' know quit asking me shit about it/
How I live is how I live why do you give a shit/
No one else does no one else bothers/
Shit makes me wanna just play a live game of Frogger/
Peep this people the shit gets even deeper/
I already know I ain't no fuckin' keeper/
Friends talk up to me and give me props and shit/
But what will the fuckers in the underground think/
Should I even care hell no I don't think so/
But I can't make it without you comin' to my shows/
So I'mma do it like this and just speak my peace/
Chill with my peeps and rap to any given beat/
You don't like my style fuck you turn it off/
I grew up not battle rapping but in a fuckin' mosh/
I won't back down because you shits think I'll bow down/
Come try some shit and see what I'm about/
I'm still the emo gothic fuck that your afraid to touch/
The stereotypes ain't a lie so you better fuckin' watch

[Hook][Escape Artist]
This is how I'm forced to live because of your view/
I've been fucking judged since before I came out the womb/
People don't think that I can make it with what I do/
But what the fuck does that even matter to you/
Looking at me you see another fucking failure/
Looking at me you see nothing but a bail-out/
Looking at me you see something short of a man/
Fuck what you see because I know who I am


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http://www.zshare.net/audio/54229547f486e64e/
Last edited by TheWeirdoIsBack on Jan 26th, '09, 02:02, edited 3 times in total.
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Re: One Verse

Postby James R. » Jan 16th, '09, 22:08

Please restructure
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Re: One Verse

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jan 19th, '09, 00:42

James R. wrote:Please restructure



Sorry bro, got a bit lazy :sweating:
How's that lookin'?
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Re: Looking At Me

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jan 26th, '09, 02:13

C'mon y'all, 60-some views and not one review?

Hook added, waiting on a verse from...someone else...not sure who else is jumping on this one lol.
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Re: Looking At Me

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jan 26th, '09, 02:22

SLMacDougall wrote:well i enjoyed it


Thanks man, glad to hear it :flower:
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Re: Looking At Me

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jan 26th, '09, 23:49

SLMacDougall wrote:
TheWeirdoIsBack wrote:
SLMacDougall wrote:well i enjoyed it


Thanks man, glad to hear it :flower:


no problem, wudnt mind doing a collab with you



Word? I don't have any audio set up just yet, but if you wanna write some shit hit me with a beat and a concept, and I'll see what I can do!
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Re: Looking At Me

Postby James R. » Jan 27th, '09, 01:30

Very good read man. Glad you bumped it.
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Re: Looking At Me

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jan 27th, '09, 21:27

James R. wrote:Very good read man. Glad you bumped it.



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Re: Looking At Me

Postby mcZu » Jan 27th, '09, 21:55

Not bad bro, just the flow is off at some points, but overall it's great :y:
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Re: Looking At Me

Postby TheWeirdoIsBack » Jan 27th, '09, 21:57

mcZu wrote:Not bad bro, just the flow is off at some points, but overall it's great :y:



Thanks man, appreciate the kind words. I noticed the flow is a bit off at times, I'll try to work on a perfect one next time :y:

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