The TRshady Forum became read-only in December 2014. The 10 year history will live on, in this archive.
Continue the discussion with the new home for the Eminem and Hip Hop discussion: HipHopShelter.com.

A Verse Of Fury

Want to share a poem, story or a moving article? Share creative literature text here.

A Verse Of Fury

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 27th, '09, 16:21

my wild style cannot be Imitated
it can only be Demonstrated
nobody wants beef with murda Matrix
it's like putting metal in ya mouth
and I don't mean Braces
if you happen to survive Ya Lucky
I'm known to end battles Abruptly
if you want to diss me then Give It Up
the only thing your gonna Spit Is Blood
maybe you'll cough up a Lung Piece
ain't nobody paying me any Money
if you say I'm fake then your Targeted
I'm only metaphorically being Artistic
so paint the picture For Me
I'll make your Story Stormy
Writing Flows like a Lightning Bolt
fuck around and get hit by a Slicing Jolt
the sound of thunder is like Knifes In Skulls
so tell me why you wanna Fight Him Foe
User avatar
Rain Matrix
Soldier
Soldier
 
Posts: 1967
Joined: Oct 6th, '06, 21:25
Location: In that mirage you saw.
Gender: Male

Re: A Verse Of Fury

Postby Emadyville » Jan 27th, '09, 16:29

Not as good as your others, this one didnt impress me, you're better than this.
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


I love you Daren
User avatar
Emadyville
Django
Django
 
Posts: 24833
Joined: Jan 17th, '08, 15:58
Location: Catasauqua PA
Gender: Male

Re: A Verse Of Fury

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 27th, '09, 16:55

it's got some good stuff in it but it didn't seem like it expressed enough to make it great
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
User avatar
Ka0t1c
Role Model
Role Model
 
Posts: 3919
Joined: Nov 16th, '05, 08:28
Location: Hell, Room #5150
Gender: Male

Re: A Verse Of Fury

Postby mcZu » Jan 27th, '09, 22:03

Gotta agree with the others, I've read better shit from you. Still it had some good lines though :y:
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
- Lupe Fiasco

Follow Me!

McZu's Blog!
User avatar
mcZu
Band Leader
Band Leader
 
Posts: 7297
Joined: Jun 17th, '08, 14:21
Location: Rotterdam
Gender: Male

Re: A Verse Of Fury

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 27th, '09, 22:17

I'm gonna have to go all out next time... I'll try to do better guys, thanks for all the feedback
User avatar
Rain Matrix
Soldier
Soldier
 
Posts: 1967
Joined: Oct 6th, '06, 21:25
Location: In that mirage you saw.
Gender: Male

Re: A Verse Of Fury

Postby Emadyville » Jan 28th, '09, 07:04

Rain Matrix wrote:I'm gonna have to go all out next time... I'll try to do better guys, thanks for all the feedback


yeah you know I read and feed most of your shit, and this just was below your usual fire, so yeah step it up you have the skill :y:
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


I love you Daren
User avatar
Emadyville
Django
Django
 
Posts: 24833
Joined: Jan 17th, '08, 15:58
Location: Catasauqua PA
Gender: Male

Re: A Verse Of Fury

Postby gutawafang » Jan 28th, '09, 07:08

I can't rap it out. But still your rhymes could be better than this as said by Emadyville.
Emadyville wrote:Not as good as your others, this one didnt impress me, you're better than this.
ADD ME ON PS4: gutawafang
Currently playing: Destiny
Image
TR Rap Battle Record: 23-8
User avatar
gutawafang
Pill Popper
Pill Popper
 
Posts: 9474
Joined: Dec 13th, '07, 08:01
Location: Lion City
Gender: Male

Re: A Verse Of Fury

Postby James R. » Jan 29th, '09, 01:45

Pretty much been said above. I'll be waiting for that all out drop. It's gonna be sick. High expectations for it bro
User avatar
James R.
Band Leader
Band Leader
 
Posts: 5044
Joined: Apr 25th, '07, 20:31
Location: Pittsburgh, PA
Gender: Male


Return to Creative Writing



Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users

cron