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Postby Solace » Jan 29th, '09, 02:13

Kinda like a second "The World" ;)

The truth is covered up, betrayal is hidden,
Happiness is forbidden, houses made of linen,
It's sickening, very few would care to help,
People asking for quarters, come on share your wealth,
Poor people practically living lives in sewage,
Trying to make a living off of simple things like music,
Society is clueless, and what about the soldiers,
How do they sleep at night? Shit, it's getting colder,
Sometimes I wanna say fuck it, break this glass,
Skip this class, suicide, suffocate on this gas.
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Re: Random Piece

Postby Requiem » Jan 29th, '09, 02:14

damn i like it man. sounds like the start to one of those long 32 bar verses :smoking:

nice shizz, i'll give it a 8/10, and continue it plz
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Re: Random Piece

Postby Solace » Jan 29th, '09, 02:17

Ice Killa wrote:damn i like it man. sounds like the start to one of those long 32 bar verses :smoking:

nice shizz, i'll give it a 8/10, and continue it plz

Haha thanks, I might add a couple lines and put it together with that piece "The World"

Coleon wrote:Dang I really liked reading that :y:

Thanks man, glad you liked it!


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Re: Random Piece

Postby Robbie G » Jan 29th, '09, 02:27

your getting better man, good to see you dropping so much. :y:
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Re: Random Piece

Postby Solace » Jan 29th, '09, 02:29

Shady Babie wrote:your getting better man, good to see you dropping so much. :y:

Well practice makes perfect :sweating: Thanks :happy:
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Re: Random Piece

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 30th, '09, 17:00

it's pretty nice man ,, i liked it ,, keep it up .. you're there :y:
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Re: Random Piece

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 30th, '09, 17:07

8/10 but u have to continue it with great writing other wise it's a .8/1,000,000
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Random Piece

Postby gutawafang » Jan 30th, '09, 17:37

nice one! short and sweeeeeeeeeeeeeEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEET! :y:
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Re: Random Piece

Postby Purple23Haze » Jan 30th, '09, 23:33

you lost it towards the end
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Re: Random Piece

Postby Solace » Jan 31st, '09, 00:14

Thanks guys, glad you liked it :happy:
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