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Beautiful Scars

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 28th, '09, 00:15

what will my Heart Say on this Dark Day every second is like Counting Threats
I'm So Hurt wondering if it really Over it feels like I have died a Thousand Deaths

seeing many Fake Scenes as I Chase Dreams untill the Ending Of Time
Warped Views have Tore Through your Core Truth Bending Ya Mind

my Crazy Thoughts will Take Me Off this planet into the arms of Loneliness
I don't Need Fiction to portray a Depiction of how these fucking Phonies Live

ahead of me is an Opening it's Spoken Things I've never Heard Before
I've Stopped Ta Say if I Walk Away the silence will be my First Reward

my Haunting Past is a Daunting Task, so I either gotta bury it or Die Trying
tho Tempted I haven't Been Tricked I close my eyes and see my Insides Crying

behind a Clear Wall the Tears Fall only to flood me with Emotions
this is how and Addict Feels when his Madness Yields to Devotion

I hate to Have Ta Fight I'd rather Grab A Mic and start Wrecking Songs
Blank Stares is what the mood Paints There could it be I'm Dead N Gone

I won't be Remembered as a Pretender recognize your Unmade Choices
know that I'm Missing You don't ever Listen To those One Way Voices

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Re: Beautiful Scars

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 28th, '09, 00:47

10/10, this is a great piece so keep it up, i think the audio would be fire once u add more to it
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Beautiful Scars

Postby gutawafang » Jan 28th, '09, 01:38

Nice way of lining it up. I like the multis. It is TRULY an art man.
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Re: Beautiful Scars

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 29th, '09, 02:43

thanks, I had to go all out after the verse of fury didn't sit well
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Re: Beautiful Scars

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jan 29th, '09, 10:12

Rain Matrix wrote:
seeing many Fake Scenes as I Chase Dreams untill the Ending Of Time
Warped Views have Tore Through your Core Truth Bending Ya Mind

ahead of me is an Opening it's Spoken Things I've never Heard Before
I've Stopped Ta Say if I Walk Away the silence will be my First Reward

my Haunting Past is a Daunting Task, so I either gotta bury it or Die Trying
tho Tempted I haven't Been Tricked I close my eyes and see my Insides Crying

behind a Clear Wall the Tears Fall only to flood me with Emotions
this is how and Addict Feels when his Madness Yields to Devotion


copyright Rain Matrix 2009


wow really wow ,, full of emotions, i do really liked it and i love these lines man .. keeep writing .. gd job 9.5/10 .. :y: :y:
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Re: Beautiful Scars

Postby The GameKeeper » Jan 29th, '09, 19:46

10/10... damn... thats the best shit i have read from you... and you have alot of nice pieces... very dope.
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Re: Beautiful Scars

Postby James R. » Jan 29th, '09, 20:23

This is what I was waiting for man. This was perfect in every sense.
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Re: Beautiful Scars

Postby °[~CHR!$~]° » Jan 29th, '09, 20:28

basiclly same wut z_em said.....full of emotions...nice read :y: :y: :y:
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Re: Beautiful Scars

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 29th, '09, 23:16

thanks for all the feedback I can't drop the ball now :happy:
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