The Cool Part 2

[Ka0t1c]

decent, i'm not a fan of the repeating words but the rhymes were good

[Slim Zaddy]

it's a decent try ,, the concept was there ,, but try to fix the structure ,, and use better rhymes as well .. anyway you're on the track .. keep it comming homie .

[Slim Zaddy]

it's a decent try ,, the concept was there ,, but try to fix the structure ,, and use better rhymes as well .. anyway you're on the track .. keep it comming homie .

I suck at structure right now, and sorry about the rhymes, they get worse when i have to write about a topic

dont woory about that , by practice you will be there ,, just keep writing ,,and try to put your full effort when writing .. write the best you can or you wont get better ,, gd luck man ,, i will be cheack yours writing ,,