bottom feeders

[Purple23Haze]

Quick sand under your feet and you don’t feel nothing but the bottom of defeat
Get it bottom of da feet take a seat let me do this the truest artist exuberant
it’s like all I got in me is fluids flows that’s fluent virulent using it abusing it
a nuisance need some coolant I pollute it shrewdness is useless you clueless
you can not do this like I do this check the movement under strict influence
Youth is what life means I scream hells bent heavens sent I can’t rest a sec never again
I’m taking your pain into my brain into my body feel it like I got shot by John Gotti
Shits got me in a choke hold feelin the pain like a broke ho fuck the po po P.O. my dads C.O.
We cold now time to start a fire take it higher electricity through wire I inspire

I'm puttin this on an audio if it gets the reaction I was thinkin

[Ka0t1c]

honestly, you've got some good vocabulary, i just can't follow thru with whatever message you're tryna get out

and also some of those things you write about isn't worth writing because it's so played out and now it's considered garbage, i think the best approach is talk about yourself or some aspect which is original material from your point of view.

sorry man, i just wasn't feeling this piece and that's prolly why nobody else has gave u feedback

try again.

[gutawafang]

I see the great multis here.
And yeah, I can't really flow. Prolly the structure.
Overall, as Kaotic said, great vocab!

[Purple23Haze]

Truth is I bit off alot more than I could chew I guess I noticed everything I have original to say has been said so instead I bit some shit I thought I could represent. Thanx for the feed