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"The Murder Scene"

Postby Wreck » Jan 31st, '09, 09:51

topical shit


You're quick to rise, when to die in action
if you supply the actin', I'll lie in fashion- if asked if
you fell down like the brim of your hats been
pull you to the pavement, a victim of traction
one less subtraction, check it, I got the math then
call me the next rapping assassin
1 bloody knife, left near Crystal Lake now
subtracts one less life being have to given the take down
I turn, killing sprees into Philly cheese
leave you guilty, jeez, like "silly me"
it's wrestling evolved into world war one
confessing, I turn whores into more corpses son
I had OJ propped up, Bill Gates shot up
digging Pac up, shit Manson, I'm a monsta
The Murder Scene; the killer, you never heard of me?
a measly menace, pulling arms out assertively
Now I leave you paralyzed, suddenly when ya bones hit
quick to leave you homeless, and then your chrome splits
Bones chip, when you're dead- before you was just homesick
Your face white- brother, like "The Jonas"
The deceased get a lease, so rest in peace
techs tested sweet, after I deaded the beef
Like BIG, Gimme The Loot, I grab the semi and shoot
you ready for food? I'll leave you like Heavy-D, dude
The old me's dead and gone- JT said it best
so, if my inside's are broken, then just let it rest
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 31st, '09, 14:50

ShadyBaby8 wrote:topical shit


You're quick to rise, when to die in action
if you supply the actin', I'll lie in fashion- if asked if
you fell down like the brim of your hats been
pull you to the pavement, a victim of traction
one less subtraction, check it, I got the math then
call me the next rapping assassin
1 bloody knife, left near Crystal Lake now
subtracts one less life being have to given the take down
I turn, killing sprees into Philly cheese
leave you guilty, jeez, like "silly me"
it's wrestling evolved into world war one
confessing, I turn whores into more corpses son
I had OJ propped up, Bill Gates shot up
digging Pac up, shit Manson, I'm a monsta
The Murder Scene; the killer, you never heard of me?
a measly menace, pulling arms out assertively
Now I leave you paralyzed, suddenly when ya bones hit
quick to leave you homeless, and then your chrome splits
Bones chip, when you're dead- before you was just homesick
Your face white- brother, like "The Jonas"
The deceased get a lease, so rest in peace
techs tested sweet, after I deaded the beef
Like BIG, Gimme The Loot, I grab the semi and shoot
you ready for food? I'll leave you like Heavy-D, dude
The old me's dead and gone- JT said it best
so, if my inside's are broken, then just let it rest

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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby Ivy » Jan 31st, '09, 14:55

Amazing talent in the making, next contests that come around you should definetely try out, you could go far... :8)
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby Wreck » Jan 31st, '09, 19:03

MC Anonymous wrote:Sick shit bro, you're quickly becoming a top Text-cee here. :y:


Thanks man. I appreciate it.
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby Wreck » Jan 31st, '09, 19:04

Ivy wrote:Amazing talent in the making, next contests that come around you should definetely try out, you could go far... :8)


Thanks Bro. Yeah I might- thanks for the feed.
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby Ivy » Jan 31st, '09, 19:48

ShadyBaby8 wrote:Thanks Bro. Yeah I might- thanks for the feed.


Bro, BRO?!?!?!?!?! Does Ivy sound like a dudes' name to you??? I am a lady and proud of it, just think of Poison Ivy from batman, easy to remember... :smoking:
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby Wreck » Jan 31st, '09, 19:52

Ivy wrote:
ShadyBaby8 wrote:Thanks Bro. Yeah I might- thanks for the feed.


Bro, BRO?!?!?!?!?! Does Ivy sound like a dudes' name to you??? I am a lady and proud of it, just think of Poison Ivy from batman, easy to remember... :smoking:


lol damn, my fault. Don't get mad :flower:.

thanks for feeedin tho
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby Wreck » Jan 31st, '09, 19:58

Coleon wrote:Yeah you're pretty fuckin dope :y: :y: :y:


Thank You!!! :smoking:
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby survce » Jan 31st, '09, 22:29

Was there any inspiration there?
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby Wreck » Jan 31st, '09, 22:35

survce wrote:Was there any inspiration there?


Only from listening to Biggy songs, and wanting to write something lyrical, portraying a story & something dark.
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby survce » Jan 31st, '09, 22:51

I'm feeling it. Cool.
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby Wreck » Jan 31st, '09, 22:57

survce wrote:I'm feeling it. Cool.


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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby mcZu » Jan 31st, '09, 23:23

Nice way of portraying a scene, flow might be off at some points though. Vocab was nice, lyricall it was great. Overall a sick drop :y:
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby Wreck » Feb 1st, '09, 06:07

mcZu wrote:Nice way of portraying a scene, flow might be off at some points though. Vocab was nice, lyricall it was great. Overall a sick drop :y:


Thanks for the feed bra. Yeah flow is always my flaw, but it's all good. Appreciate you stopping by and giving feed on it, regardless.
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Re: "The Murder Scene"

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 1st, '09, 07:52

it's very good .. i liked the concept . and the flow . rhymes too were pretty good .. nice shit bro .. keep it up .. gd job homie :y: :y:
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