somethin new and off the top for y'all (feed)- my 1st on TR

[Wreck]

I freestyled some shit, to improve, cause I'm not good, and I remembered and was able to re-spit the shit I made up off the time. Anyways, I'm ok on some of this shit but need feed. No real topic. I was mostly just fuckin with the multis, then at the end I got a little serious with it. let me know how it is please.

I- smash bottles, pack hollows
clap models until you yap "Bravo!"
and attack & swallow like Polamalu
snatch Tahoes and proceed to pop and drop you, follow suite
you trash kid, for your last hit- got blasted
I'm back rich, on point like cactus', stop practice
I'm, smashed bitch, on acid, high on root beer
Go invisible on Christmas, learn to fly on New Years
You don't know all of the things that I've been through
I'll ask your girl, like Gatorade, "Is it in you?"
The Gold Mic like Reagen's era- don't touch it
barely dusted, God I trust in, pain I punched in, gotten rusted
caught with what? Busted..I ought to brush this canvas off ,
Emcees get eaten up like lunch quick- dammnit y'all
been through the pain and struggles, went through the game-so-subtle
ready to aim, when trouble- arises like skies above you, double
my life is a bitch, risk it all in a dice-
live it small but to a price, ready to crawl out of sight
that's why I ball cause it's right, chew out raps, raw like-mice
fall-like-flights, tall-like-heights, in the mall all night
stall-in-fights, that's when I hit the wall-n-ignite
like stallin-writes, a "single death is a tragedy."
I see y'all will be happy when I fall like gravity
why y'all mad at me? I'm a beast like the Abominable
Osama's through- let's see what Obama will do


I'm out

[MC Anonymous]

I freestyled some shit, to improve, cause I'm not good, and I remembered and was able to re-spit the shit I made up off the time. Anyways, I'm ok on some of this shit but need feed. No real topic. I was mostly just fuckin with the multis, then at the end I got a little serious with it. let me know how it is please.

I- smash bottles, pack hollows
clap models until you yap "Bravo!"
and attack & swallow like Polamalu
snatch Tahoes and proceed to pop and drop you, follow suite
you trash kid, for your last hit- got blasted
I'm back rich, on point like cactus', stop practice
I'm, smashed bitch, on acid, high on root beer
Go invisible on Christmas, learn to fly on New Years
You don't know all of the things that I've been through
I'll ask your girl, like Gatorade, "Is it in you?"
The Gold Mic like Reagen's era- don't touch it
barely dusted, God I trust in, pain I punched in, gotten rusted
caught with what? Busted..I ought to brush this canvas off ,
Emcees get eaten up like lunch quick- dammnit y'all
been through the pain and struggles, went through the game-so-subtle
ready to aim, when trouble- arises like skies above you, double
my life is a bitch, risk it all in a dice-
live it small but to a price, ready to crawl out of sight
that's why I ball cause it's right, chew out raps, raw like-mice
fall-like-flights, tall-like-heights, in the mall all night
stall-in-fights, that's when I hit the wall-n-ignite
like stallin-writes, a "single death is a tragedy."
I see y'all will be happy when I fall like gravity
why y'all mad at me? I'm a beast like the Abominable
Osama's through- let's see what Obama will do


I'm out

You got serious talent bro, work on punchlines/wordplay to give your drops a WOW factor. Also structure your pieces better so you can flow easier. I see a lot of potential in you, more then most new people on here. Keep dropping man, peace

[Wreck]

You got serious talent bro, work on punchlines/wordplay to give your drops a WOW factor. Also structure your pieces better so you can flow easier. I see a lot of potential in you, more then most new people on here. Keep dropping man, peace

Thanks for the (honest) feed man. I think I fucked around with this one- was just working with multies and didn't really develop a structure for the rhymes or a topic, like with the "Murder Scene" but it's all good, I need a lil bit of work anyway. Thanks again.

[Ka0t1c]

not too bad at all, you've got some creative talent arising

[mcZu]

Not bad, rhymings was great. Try to be creative next time and use some wordplay

[Wreck]

I fuckin loved it, next Mc Anon from all the stuff i've looked at by you. Keep posting

Glad you enjoyed it bro. Wow MCA, my dude, you're getting tons of love over here in this section lol. I hope so- that dude is ill and creative with his punches and rhymes overall. Thanks for the feed & all that, man.

not too bad at all, you've got some creative talent arising

Good to hear. Thanks man. I'd like to think that- thanks for the feed.

Not bad, rhymings was great. Try to be creative next time and use some wordplay

Yeah I definitely will, man. Thanks for the feed.