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Incase You Forgot

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 31st, '09, 23:29

Lyrical masterpiece, beast from the east atleast
appease my dominance, otherwise my gat's teeth
will slice this beef, twice my sleeves caught on pyro
that's alright though, this bright glow around my flow
will blow this show, the lyrical imperial, my material
cause eye hallucinations, fuckin' with a killer that's serial
damage cornea fibers, cornier lairs get laid off and retired
these wires blow from the lighters as saliva glands I acquired
Who want's it, I flaunt shit, damage with haunted glyphs
paranormal extraterrestrial texture material that's selfish
fully loaded, belly exploded and guts eroded, I've honed shit
guns makes ya bones split, I get burned by my own spit
fiery elegance with relevance, these shells will bend, spend
this is the end, hellish wind, burn all with a stroke of my pen
tokens of pain, your hopeless with shame, I'm just insane
a thin brain, framed within names, gained and been sprained

Strike with fireballs, while jumpin' higher walls like baseball players
the case of all scares, comes from my heir, Wreckless over there
Anonymous, Wreckless, a lyrical tech fest, expect best verbiage
algorithm intertwined within rhythm to hit them with burning fists
turn on this, this adversary nad's are hairy to step to lyrical purity
it's either you or me, I blew your knees you fuckin' little puny flee
so pray to me, repent or get bent, spent, smashed and destroyed
boiled in soy, wrapped up like sushi, fishy like pussy, now your void
I'm psycho, my nines blow, like child porn in a third grade classroom
yeah it's that soon, my flow stay rising and constant like a full moon
infrared only time you see war, these spore lifeforms grow from my core
smash down doors of reality, replace with insanity, lined like shores
sections of 8, bloodshed around the edges, a war zone stop sign
cause' when I drop mine, it's WWII over again, make ya eyes blind
you're nothing to me, sucker emcees get smashed with Maui Thai knees
stay ahead like Chinese, shoot me you kill yourself like we Siamese.
Last edited by MC Anonymous on Feb 1st, '09, 00:03, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: Incase You Forgot [NOT DONE]

Postby mcZu » Jan 31st, '09, 23:32

Flowed great, vocab is insane and the rhyming is great. Just don't feeling the undone pieces you drop bro, the whole wrap is more enjoyable then reading it in pieces, but nevertheless I enjoyed reading it :y:
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Re: Incase You Forgot [NOT DONE]

Postby MC Anonymous » Jan 31st, '09, 23:35

mcZu wrote:Flowed great, vocab is insane and the rhyming is great. Just don't feeling the undone pieces you drop bro, the whole wrap is more enjoyable then reading it in pieces, but nevertheless I enjoyed reading it :y:

Thanks dude :y:
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby mcZu » Feb 1st, '09, 00:06

Second verse is fire, that's what I mean. A whole piece to enjoy, no complaints so far bro. Well maybe the flow, it looked off at some points. Overall great :y:
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby James R. » Feb 1st, '09, 02:29

This is some sicknasty shit bro. Great job. Flow was on lock. Everything else was as sick as usual.
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby MC Anonymous » Feb 1st, '09, 03:07

James R. wrote:This is some sicknasty shit bro. Great job. Flow was on lock. Everything else was as sick as usual.

Thanks dude :y:
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby Solace » Feb 1st, '09, 03:31

That was pure fire. I enjoyed both verses quite equally, nice piece :y:
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby MC Anonymous » Feb 1st, '09, 03:48

Epiphany wrote:That was pure fire. I enjoyed both verses quite equally, nice piece :y:

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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby MC Anonymous » Feb 1st, '09, 15:49

Bump, more feed please? :flower:
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby Ivy » Feb 1st, '09, 17:07

I would have to say I enjoyed the second verse by far. It's flow and lierical concept, not to metion your vas expansion of vocab, makes it piece together nicely and altogether a wonderful read.
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby MC Anonymous » Feb 1st, '09, 17:50

Ivy wrote:I would have to say I enjoyed the second verse by far. It's flow and lierical concept, not to metion your vas expansion of vocab, makes it piece together nicely and altogether a wonderful read.

Thanks! :flower: . Second verse I tried to add more wordplay and make the flow better. Glad to see you enjoyed it :happy:
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby Ivy » Feb 1st, '09, 17:58

MC Anonymous wrote:Thanks! :flower: . Second verse I tried to add more wordplay and make the flow better. Glad to see you enjoyed it :happy:


I would do that same exact technique in your next writing, but try something emotional, something that would really draw the audience in and make the gape in awe. ;) Just a little helpful hint... :sweating:
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby gutawafang » Feb 1st, '09, 17:59

As usual. Consistent.

Good vocab. Good multi. Why don't you record? Your voice's pretty good.

Yeah, 9/10. :happy:
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby MC Anonymous » Feb 1st, '09, 17:59

Ivy wrote:
MC Anonymous wrote:Thanks! :flower: . Second verse I tried to add more wordplay and make the flow better. Glad to see you enjoyed it :happy:


I would do that same exact technique in your next writing, but try something emotional, something that would really draw the audience in and make the gape in awe. ;) Just a little helpful hint... :sweating:

I got an emotional post on here, I'll bump it for you. :y:
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Re: Incase You Forgot

Postby MC Anonymous » Feb 1st, '09, 18:03

gutawafang wrote:As usual. Consistent.

Good vocab. Good multi. Why don't you record? Your voice's pretty good.

Yeah, 9/10. :happy:

Haven't been in the mood to record. I'll record soon though. :y:
Thanks for the feed :flower:
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