Get Money

[slimsoxshady]

i've been reading your guy's drops and most everything is so damn serious, like damn lighten up ..jk...so this is kinda to lighten the mood a little, go get money!!...

your girl told me she like my skin tone
i'm too high and too fly, completely miss Rome
tryin ta step ta me kid, i'll crush ya
leave your coat so red, its like you fought for Russia
my money tall, i got them big stacks
life's a roller coaster, i make you pay for it like Six Flags
hurricane flow, with your insane hoe
my currency's whoa, plus currently mo
they used to tell me "do something you lazy ass"
now i can't control my money, that's some "crazy cash"
losing track of my finances, cuz they just A-D-D (get it?)
how am i suppose to rap? just murdered the A-B-C's
to all the haters, i'ma show em so-they-see
you be fucked without money, while my dough-rape-me (haha)
got more sources to get paid than the internet
like a cornerback in gettin money, i just intercept
Ben Franklin on the hundred, thats some paper fame
but i don't feel like doin that, I just pay-for-fame
had rhythm in me as a child, the-best-clapper-at-five
add some swagger and you get, THE-BEST-RAPPER-ALIVE

-lil wayne's ghost writer (aka myself)

[gutawafang]

seriously i could rap it out well. nice one. and

they used to tell me "do something you lazy ass"
now i can't control my money, that's some "crazy cash"

that lines hooked me man

[Slim Zaddy]

not bad as i could see , it was so simple . you had the flow on this verse , rhymes were kinda weak at some parts , lyrics are simple too , it could fit as a freestyle , try to use more vocab , in-rhymes would help . smilies , metaphors , nd dont repeat rhymes like (fame) this shows weakness .. these staff what make a piece dope and sick ,, but it was a good try , keep writing man

[slimsoxshady]

not bad as i could see , it was so simple . you had the flow on this verse , rhymes were kinda weak at some parts , lyrics are simple too , it could fit as a freestyle , try to use more vocab , in-rhymes would help . smilies , metaphors , nd dont repeat rhymes like (fame) this shows weakness .. these staff what make a piece dope and sick ,, but it was a good try , keep writing man

it was just some lines i came up with about money, kinda shit i'd spit in a cypher at or school or just get a laugh, not tryin to be super lytical...i used to try and be real lyrical and didn't make sense a lot of times...so i basically try and come up with simple rhymes now cuz thats what most of the people i see everyday seem to like...and this shit had plenty of metaphors and similes so i really don't know what you be smoking ma man lol...sike its all good

[Slim Zaddy]

not bad as i could see , it was so simple . you had the flow on this verse , rhymes were kinda weak at some parts , lyrics are simple too , it could fit as a freestyle , try to use more vocab , in-rhymes would help . smilies , metaphors , nd dont repeat rhymes like (fame) this shows weakness .. these staff what make a piece dope and sick ,, but it was a good try , keep writing man

it was just some lines i came up with about money, kinda shit i'd spit in a cypher at or school or just get a laugh, not tryin to be super lytical...i used to try and be real lyrical and didn't make sense a lot of times...so i basically try and come up with simple rhymes now cuz thats what most of the people i see everyday seem to like...and this shit had plenty of metaphors and similes so i really don't know what you be smoking ma man lol...sike its all good

not most of us likes simple rhymes .. as you said ,, you could have the same flow and concept with a better rhymes and vocab used in this piece, , i did'nt say it's bad,, and i did'nt say you dont have metaphors or smilies in your piece man ,, i sayed use more and make them better,, .. . so i guess i'm not the one who's been on smoking or soemthin lol .. it's was a good try anyway ,, keep writing man

[slimsoxshady]

not bad as i could see , it was so simple . you had the flow on this verse , rhymes were kinda weak at some parts , lyrics are simple too , it could fit as a freestyle , try to use more vocab , in-rhymes would help . smilies , metaphors , nd dont repeat rhymes like (fame) this shows weakness .. these staff what make a piece dope and sick ,, but it was a good try , keep writing man

it was just some lines i came up with about money, kinda shit i'd spit in a cypher at or school or just get a laugh, not tryin to be super lytical...i used to try and be real lyrical and didn't make sense a lot of times...so i basically try and come up with simple rhymes now cuz thats what most of the people i see everyday seem to like...and this shit had plenty of metaphors and similes so i really don't know what you be smoking ma man lol...sike its all good

not most of us likes simple rhymes .. as you said ,, you could have the same flow and concept with a better rhymes and vocab used in this piece, , i did'nt say it's bad,, and i did'nt say you dont have metaphors or smilies in your piece man ,, i sayed use more and make them better,, .. . so i guess i'm not the one who's been on smoking or soemthin lol .. it's was a good try anyway ,, keep writing man

its all good dude, just some freestyle lines thats all...you should check out my myspace page at the bottom of my sig for this song i did called "alphakill" if you're into lyrical ish

[gutawafang]

its all good dude, just some freestyle lines thats all...you should check out my myspace page at the bottom of my sig for this song i did called "alphakill" if you're into lyrical ish
*quoted

i was just trying to check you out. you got a good voice man.

[slimsoxshady]

its all good dude, just some freestyle lines thats all...you should check out my myspace page at the bottom of my sig for this song i did called "alphakill" if you're into lyrical ish
*quoted

i was just trying to check you out. you got a good voice man.

thanxxx...i wish i had more time to do more songs but now that i'm in college, its hard to find the time...i'm kinda of a loner so rap has brought me some personal entertainment so to speak haha

[gutawafang]

its all good dude, just some freestyle lines thats all...you should check out my myspace page at the bottom of my sig for this song i did called "alphakill" if you're into lyrical ish
*quoted

i was just trying to check you out. you got a good voice man.

thanxxx...i wish i had more time to do more songs but now that i'm in college, its hard to find the time...i'm kinda of a loner so rap has brought me some personal entertainment so to speak haha

yeah... same here man. I have no friends around me in school that likes rap. they don't even KNOW eminem. sighs... Singapore...

[slimsoxshady]

its all good dude, just some freestyle lines thats all...you should check out my myspace page at the bottom of my sig for this song i did called "alphakill" if you're into lyrical ish
*quoted

i was just trying to check you out. you got a good voice man.

thanxxx...i wish i had more time to do more songs but now that i'm in college, its hard to find the time...i'm kinda of a loner so rap has brought me some personal entertainment so to speak haha

yeah... same here man. I have no friends around me in school that likes rap. they don't even KNOW eminem. sighs... Singapore...

well then i'd say they're living worthless lives lol

[gutawafang]

Yes. I sorta agree.

Well, i don't think they would even FEEL this song you have here. I think they don't know what shit is. Know i'm saying?

Fuck it. LOL.

[James R.]

You know if that was a single on the radio it'd be an ok verse. The murdered the ABC's line reminded me too much of Em's "I can't rap anymore, I just murdered the alphabet" in Still Don't Give a Fuck, so I'd be careful with that one. Past that you had some nice lines. Playing off the ABC line with the do-rae-mi/dough rape me line was pretty clever. The crazy money line was a nice punch. I liked it. Flow was good. I'd like to see if you could make this into a song without it getting boring because I think with the right beat this could be a pretty good track.

What can you improve on... hmm... it's a really solid track. Umm I'd say if you write stuff like this later on make sure you don't come so close to another artist's line. Not that it's a necessarily bad thing, but some people will bitch at you because of it.

[slimsoxshady]

thanx for the input guys