NEW - The Faint Memory Of You (Revised)

[Solace]

[Verse]
The lights turn off, shallow emptiness surrounds,
My happiness was stolen, and my heart felt like it drowned,
It was like an abstract, a verbal punch to my gut,
I had mentally killed myself, thrown my body in a rut,
Still remember those days, when you started acting moody,
When I gave you those flowers, yet you yelled at me crudely,
I'd buy you chocolates but you threw them out for no reason,
I'd pick them from the trash, sit down and then I'd eat them,
It wasn't easy to take the words which came out of your mouth,
To register in my mind, no matter how loud you would shout,
Waking up with dry tears on my face, I wonder why,
Still remember you asking for my number a couple times,
A gorgeous autumn day, things seemed to be going well,
Never thought this friendship would make my life go to hell,
What goes up, must go down, and guess what? It fell,
Now I'm stuck, like a young child who was stuck in a well,
You were my savior, you made me smile every time I cried,
You found me when I was angered and everytime I tried to hide,
And I thank you, but I feel bad, you treated me finely,
But I never took the chance to ever treat you divinely,
You're the meat to my bones, you're the blood to my heart,
You're the legs to my stool, you're the paintbrush to my art,
You're my everything, there is no other way to define you,
There is no other way God could possibly refine you.

[Hook x2]
I thank you for the memories, I hate you for the ending,
I love you for the special moments, I hate you for pretending,
I just guess I wasn't enough, just wasn't enough,
I just guess I wasn't enough, just wasn't enough.

[Requiem]

u definitely onto something with these poetry flows man, i loved how it flowed. can't say i liked it as much as some of ur other pieces, but the emotions in it were could. i could really feel the emptiness and shizz, nice job

overall 7/10, fair, with good flow and emotion

[Solace]

u definitely onto something with these poetry flows man, i loved how it flowed. can't say i liked it as much as some of ur other pieces, but the emotions in it were could. i could really feel the emptiness and shizz, nice job

overall 7/10, fair, with good flow and emotion

Thanks dude

[gutawafang]

i feel this shit man. love.

and i think it flows well, i could rap it out!

good vocab as always, epiphany.

[Slim Zaddy]

not your best ,, but still sounds good .. rhymes were fine,, and the concept was there ,, gd job bro

[SajN]

Not so very complex drop. Very few multies, but since I felt that this was kinda like a poem, it doesn't matter. The flow is pretty good, and so is the emotion in this piece, so nice job on that!
This isn't one of your best though, but it's good.

[Solace]

Thanks all for feeding! I really appreciate it, you all know that.

[gutawafang]

hmmm. revised. nice hook. i wanna hear you sing this.

[Solace]

hmmm. revised. nice hook. i wanna hear you sing this.

I might Im using the instrumental for Where'd You Go by Fort Minor if anyones wondering. Thanks for checking it!

[gutawafang]

hmmm. revised. nice hook. i wanna hear you sing this.

I might Im using the instrumental for Where'd You Go by Fort Minor if anyones wondering. Thanks for checking it!

Nice. I've always liked that beat. And post the complete song with lyrics up.

[Solace]

hmmm. revised. nice hook. i wanna hear you sing this.

I might Im using the instrumental for Where'd You Go by Fort Minor if anyones wondering. Thanks for checking it!

Nice. I've always liked that beat. And post the complete song with lyrics up.

This pretty much is the whole song lol

YOU'RE the meat to my bones, you're the blood to my heart,
You're the legs to my stool, you're the paintbrush to my art,


good drop, i could picture this stuff really good
you are being very poetic, nice

Lol didnt notice that, thanks. Glad you like it

[gutawafang]

i feel it man. i mean, make this a good one. i've never heard your voice before man. so... first impression!

[Solace]

Verse was dope, call it dick riding if you want lol j/k

I'm not really feeling the chorus at all, but it might work. I say record it, and see if it sounds good, & scrap it if it doesn't. But I guess that is just common sense

But dope verse, I looked and couldn't find any faults. Just teenage mutant lyrical action

Haha thanks man

best i've seen u do, but maybe i just like the love stuff. i cud relate to it, really gd. well done.

Thanks Scott Glad you liked it a lot!

[James R.]

So I know for a fact I've read this yet I don't see a comment from me smh. Well i really liked it. I liked the emotions of it, and I liked how the vocab and multies didn't have to suffer because it was an emotional piece. Very good job for that. The flow fell off at some points because there was like one or two too many words like here

You're the meat to my bones, you're the blood to my heart,
You're the legs to my stool, you're the paintbrush to my art,

if you made it

You're the meat to my bones, you're the blood to my heart,
You're the legs to my stool, the paintbrush to my art,

I think it'd flow a lot better. Excellent job though. And i thought the hook/chorus was very catchy and fit the content well. Keep it. Chet aint bout it

[Solace]

So I know for a fact I've read this yet I don't see a comment from me smh. Well i really liked it. I liked the emotions of it, and I liked how the vocab and multies didn't have to suffer because it was an emotional piece. Very good job for that. The flow fell off at some points because there was like one or two too many words like here

You're the meat to my bones, you're the blood to my heart,
You're the legs to my stool, you're the paintbrush to my art,

if you made it

You're the meat to my bones, you're the blood to my heart,
You're the legs to my stool, the paintbrush to my art,

I think it'd flow a lot better. Excellent job though. And i thought the hook/chorus was very catchy and fit the content well. Keep it. Chet aint bout it

Thanks man, as usual, i appreciate your good feedback. Really man . Glad you enjoyed it too.