My Hidden Love

[Slim Zaddy]

It’s a played concept except im afraid its true
This girl I know I love, but she don’t know I do
To you, I can’t say, no way… her name is hidden
Its forbidden cos she might see this, n think im kidding
But im living in a day dream, her face the vision
Her body and personality I wish would be given
To me, you see her touch, her smile, is why im living
And us kissing would make the past worthwhile
Then all the pain wouldn’t be in vane, I’ve compiled
It would make a mile out of a million, if she’s willing
To take onboard this civilian… cos I long for her…
Like water in a drought, no doubt… does she concur?
I don’t know… but it’s about time I told the world
Well not you, but she will soon have heard the words
“I love you, so will you be my girl?”… you heard!
Yes, that’s what ima say some day soon cos it hurts…
Deep down, underground in my heart, I nurse
These feelings, like a curse, I find it hard breathing
And im tired of deceiving… and what’s the reason?
Cos im scared she don’t feel the same... that’s unpleasing
It would be like a lesion straight thru my chest
That’s why I try to impress… each day and the next
But now ive got nothing left to lose… its time to say
So tomorrow ill announce it… yes, ill be brave
Cos im losin my mind in a maze… its killing me
So I’ll utter the words… “you’re my darling, will it be”

[mcZu]

Nice vibe, lyrics were above average, felt every word you wrote. Flow was shaky though, structure was not bad, emotion wise it's sick. Some Ll Cool j shit there except for the flow, gotta work on that bro, unless you have a specific beat in mind that suits it perfectly.

[Slim Zaddy]

Nice vibe, lyrics were above average, felt every word you wrote. Flow was shaky though, structure was not bad, emotion wise it's sick. Some Ll Cool j shit there except for the flow, gotta work on that bro, unless you have a specific beat in mind that suits it perfectly.

well ya the beat is in my mind , i'm gonna do it by my own ,, before i wrote this i was rapping it , so dont worry about that , it flowed well to me , glad you liked it McZu ,nd much appreciated bro ..

[neversnooze]

from what i read from you, you always wrote about life and war. but love is a new category for you. it was well written, i liked how it was killing you from the inside until you told her how you felt. getting stuff out of your chest is so relaxing.

good write

[Slim Zaddy]

from what i read from you, you always wrote about life and war. but love is a new category for you. it was well written, i liked how it was killing you from the inside until you told her how you felt. getting stuff out of your chest is so relaxing.

good write

thanks neversnooze . always i do appreciate your comment's .. and ya it's kinda of changin my mood .. and this is me really getting shit out of my chest ,, this happend to me , but i'm over it right know , , but i though why not writing something about it ,, and ya it's feel so damn good .. thanks again bro

[gutawafang]

Its forbidden cos she might see this, n think im kidding

Overall, I can't rap it out. But yeah, lyrically and expressively, it's great.

[Slim Zaddy]

Its forbidden cos she might see this, n think im kidding

Overall, I can't rap it out. But yeah, lyrically and expressively, it's great.

thanks man ,, always appreciated

[James R.]

You know this is one of your more average pieces, but when I read it I felt a very laid back flow to it and I really enjoyed it. It wasn't overly lyrical, it wasn't overly emotional though you were expressing yourself well, it was like an internal confession and I just really liked it. Mechanically it was good, creatively it was good, but I've seen you do better. It was just a great vibe.

[Slim Zaddy]

You know this is one of your more average pieces, but when I read it I felt a very laid back flow to it and I really enjoyed it. It wasn't overly lyrical, it wasn't overly emotional though you were expressing yourself well, it was like an internal confession and I just really liked it. Mechanically it was good, creatively it was good, but I've seen you do better. It was just a great vibe.

ya i know man ,, i'm so glad that you enjoyed it ,, i'm return to my lyrical pieces again then ,,

I can't fuck with Jame's comment so just read his again

thanks for checkin it out , much appreciated