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Random Keystyle

Postby Solace » Feb 4th, '09, 23:55

He's just a little kid who likes to stick to youth,
Anyone who thinks otherwise has to miss a screw,
Cause this bitch will boom, whoops slip of the tooth,
Slip of the noose and he's sick in the booth,
Sipping the juice, man he's tripping on his shoes,
Heard he was dead? Well your missing the news,
Lipping the lyrics, girlfriend is bitching to you,
"Where's my present!?" it's a razor now get it smooth,
He's itching to pursue, hes kicking and you'll lose,
Kicking the goofs, Canadian sticking to truth.

edit: oh shit i just noticed i bit a rhyme off steve spag, i started the rhyme scheme from Steve's Dead Or Alive, and i rhymed the same thing (missing the news)

Sorry, you can just uh disregard that line.
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Re: Random Keystyle

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 5th, '09, 13:11

pretty tight bro ,, i hev seen you these times writing small pieces,, before you were writing full songs ,, so get back pal .. anyway the flow here is great ,, i can't flow with it easly ,, rhyming and lyrics were there,, its short but still nice.. gd job here shadymademe :y:
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Re: Random Keystyle

Postby mcZu » Feb 5th, '09, 23:19

The whole good thing on this piece was the flow, that flowed fucking great. Lyrics weren't that special still enjoyable. Rhyme scheme was good though.
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Re: Random Keystyle

Postby Requiem » Feb 5th, '09, 23:37

nice piece man. it's short, but it's pretty cool. loved the flow, and even tho it's about a tough kid, it felt light hearted for some odd reason :unsure:
good drop :8)
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Re: Random Keystyle

Postby Solace » Feb 6th, '09, 01:08

Thanks all you guys, glad you liked it!
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Re: Random Keystyle

Postby Solace » Feb 6th, '09, 01:14

Coleon wrote:
Ice Killa wrote:nice piece man. it's short, but it's pretty cool. loved the flow, and even tho it's about a tough kid, it felt light hearted for some odd reason :unsure:
good drop :8)


my feelings exactly, good job :y:

Thanks man :y:
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Re: Random Keystyle

Postby James R. » Feb 6th, '09, 21:25

I liked it. Actually didn't notice the line until you mentioned it and I checked lol. Nice multies though man, very cool that you kept it throughout the whole verse. Flow was there, rhyming was there. Overall good piece. There were a couple lines when I thought slight word changes could have made perfect multies, but it's no big deal for real. Good job.
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Re: Random Keystyle

Postby Solace » Feb 7th, '09, 00:47

James R. wrote:I liked it. Actually didn't notice the line until you mentioned it and I checked lol. Nice multies though man, very cool that you kept it throughout the whole verse. Flow was there, rhyming was there. Overall good piece. There were a couple lines when I thought slight word changes could have made perfect multies, but it's no big deal for real. Good job.

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