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Just a Keystyle

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Just a Keystyle

Postby Requiem » Feb 7th, '09, 04:42

Ur boobs are stretched out like they made of silicone.
Shit's faker than a voice soundin' through a telephone.
i got chicks runnin to me like i got a magnet as cologne.
but i don't know what the hell they smellin' on,
cuz i aint bathed since june, 2001.
i got fumes comin outta my long johns,
i turn shit colors, can turn a mit into a pair of palm palms.
get ur ass screamin like a star wars ton ton,
feed ur desire like a chocolate bon bon,
u don't know where the hell i'm at, i'm long gone.
so grab a tom tom, or a gps from ur i phone,
and sooner or later u'll find Waldo,
in the mall no... clothes on so....
watch where u go, cuz he's a stalker with a package for u.....

meh, just writin stuff, it's late. ;)
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Re: Just a Keystyle

Postby Solace » Feb 7th, '09, 06:27

that was uh...something. lol. didnt really like it tbh but i could see some multies there, and slant rhymes :y:
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Re: Just a Keystyle

Postby Requiem » Feb 7th, '09, 06:47

^thx for the feed u guys. i was just in one of those random feelings. lmao :sweating:
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Re: Just a Keystyle

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 7th, '09, 11:27

it's was a good drop , i enjoyed it
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Re: Just a Keystyle

Postby James R. » Feb 7th, '09, 16:54

Pretty lame imo. Rhyming was average at best, flow was decent, structure switched kinda randomly. Beginning was the better part, but I still didn't like it. 1 and john don't rhyme btw unless you say 1 like the name Juan. Keep droppin tho
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