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Re: Redemption

Postby James R. » Feb 7th, '09, 16:48

Nice vocab, really nice multies, good flow to it, sick concepts throughout it. I really enjoyed this piece man. The structure kinda reminded me of MC Anon, but the rhyme scheme was way different and pretty original. Good job bro. Keep it up.
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Re: Redemption

Postby mcZu » Feb 7th, '09, 22:16

Nice drop man, I love reading this kind of lyrics. Flow remined me of Crooked I, rhyme-pattern is great and nice vocab man, nothing really to complain. Don't know how you gonna deliver this though, but that depends on you and the beat. Keep dropping :y:
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Re: Redemption

Postby Spyder » Feb 8th, '09, 02:12

fire baby, love the creative writing. :worship:
ima try my own tell me what u think :unsure:
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Re: Redemption

Postby MC Anonymous » Feb 8th, '09, 02:24

Coleon wrote:
Slim313Shady wrote:fire baby, love the creative writing. :worship:
ima try my own tell me what u think :unsure:


I've only been writing this MC Anon like way :sweating:
for a little bit, and sure I'll check it

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Pretty good, I thought it could've been more hard hitting, but for what it was it was alright.
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Re: Redemption

Postby MC Anonymous » Feb 8th, '09, 02:28

Coleon wrote:Don't take it as offense I just want to broaden the vocab I use naturally in raps :)

nah dude I understand. It's good that you are and I didn't mean it as anything but a joke :) :b:
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