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Re: WAR

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 8th, '09, 08:45

well i at first it was good and catchy , then it begins to step back a little ,but anyway it was god man ,rhymes were good , lyrics were average i could flow with it , so it's not bad ,, 7/10 ,, keep it up
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Re: WAR

Postby James R. » Feb 8th, '09, 16:20

I enjoyed the message it sent more than anything. The rhyming was best at the beginning, but good throughout the entire thing. The flow was there for 95% of it (there was like a part of a line that threw it off a bit) and it was a nice take on your opinions and values. Good job man.
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Re: WAR

Postby gutawafang » Feb 8th, '09, 17:52

Lookin back in history means nothing, it’s disgustin

NICE LINE you have there. :happy:
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