by Tornado » Feb 11th, '09, 15:51
Ok, it's not great but I don't know whether you guys were doing a parody or really trrying in this song.
Ice Killa, you sound like your just rapping for the first time ever, the intro was the best part of the song, the chorus started well but went offbeat horribly.
1st Verse- The lyrics are random and didn't make sense, you were actually on time for the most part but your delievery is lacking punch and conviction. You should add a second layer to your verse and add ad-libs on it. Your voice still is weird to me but it'll change over time but it does sound nerdy
2nd Verse- Woah Mobie Phone Quality (remembers those times)...hopefull you get a better mic soon. That "Tone" verse is great and you had ok lyrics jusy bad lyrics
3rd Verse- Anon, you got potnential, the best out the 3 by far, but track don't suit you, and also sounds your shouting too much, learn to control your voice a bit and you can use stabs and ad-libs and additional layers to bring extar presence but i actually enjoyed your part
3K & Out