Punches & Multis

[Wreck]

working on wordplay, multies & punches here, along with structuring my lyrics faster, on the page...


yo, I put the pen to the pad quick
some fascist gave me a fat lip, so that's it!
I'm done, end my career with an ad lib
But I could turn back in time- after a back flip
one life to live, it's time to leave your back stiff
cause nothing's guaranteed in life, 'cept death and taxes
I let the streets walk with me, like models on the runway
mark the service Sunday, made you nervous with the gun play
would you please- let me know when the beat's done?
You claim hood status, ever been to the street's son?
so what's be-come, of the belly of the beast; young?
Came for the weather, but I'm down for the beach buns
Mark the calender, everyday is a day trip
different times, new toilets- but the same shit
Work is dead now, cause I have the grave shift
Old school mentality- but I do keep it basic
Boss-to-newby don't see eye to eye like lasik
Old town- new world, so I call it The Matrix
Heard about Penn State, never been to the State Pen
No criminal history- you can call me fake then
I, slash tires, crack wires, like braces bent
Homebound, but I been to places that you never been
And I've, Eaten fresh pussy like fine cuisine
Get mad- cause if you've got a problem, that's fine with me
Got more drama then 50- I stir up shit like tsunamis
Which would you rather do, "eat panini or punani?"....


26 Bars, no topic

[Slim Zaddy]

well you got nor concept but that's fine ,, you got some good multies and punches out there. some of em are kinda weak , but others are so tight . flow was fixed compared to your previous drop , some words dont rhyme together , and structure need to be fixed , but that can be fixed easily so it's a good practice , gd job keep it comming .. 8/10

[gutawafang]

Good practice! Great flow, I managed to rap the whole thing in one read!

[Wreck]

well you got nor concept but that's fine ,, you got some good multies and punches out there. some of em are kinda weak , but others are so tight . flow was fixed compared to your previous drop , some words dont rhyme together , and structure need to be fixed , but that can be fixed easily so it's a good practice , gd job keep it comming .. 8/10

Thanks for the feed, first off. Every line fits and rhymes. You just have to rhyme it out, or have the same flow when rapping it out loud or in your head, which is hard, cause the flow can be fast, flow, on and off or just a pattern somebody can't figure out to rap to, over the net. I'll most likely record most of thse keystyles, if you will, to not only show that everything fits flow and rhyme wise, but just to put it over a beat and to make it into a song/melody or freestyle. But yeah, that is true. Yeah I did no topic on purpose. Just to work, work with and improve on multis, punches & even a little wordplay too in my rhymes. Good shit tho- thanks for all the feed.

[Wreck]

Good practice! Great flow, I managed to rap the whole thing in one read!

Thanks man- good feed. Glad you were able to go with the flow, to see if shit fit- good idea too, as I did it as well. Appreciated.

More feed please. Tryna improve everytime.

[Ka0t1c]

i like it, this is a great piece, it needs no concept, i enjoy lyrics like this

[Wreck]

i like it, this is a great piece, it needs no concept, i enjoy lyrics like this

Thanks man- good looks on the feed; appreciated.