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Yvonne 2

Postby gutawafang » Mar 13th, '09, 18:11

No this ain't supposed to be a composition for ya
It ain't even close to a dedication to ya
It's not even a post to describe ya
Not even feelings to expose, not even a boast to ya

No, it's not happening, Project Rachel's relaunched
No, there wasn't no Elliryanna Angel I flaunt
There wasn't no partners in my life before
I know it bores you in this story, you snore

But if you don't read, you readers ain't gonna know truth
How am I expected to brighten my youth?
Wait, why am I rhyming again and again?
It's like I'm doing it in vain, and in the honor of pain

For entertaining and explaining, let me tell you it ain't
It is love in my veins telling my brains to contain
All these feelings I believe it's too easy to sustain
And I'm gonna maintain, but I'm actually going insane

Love's inhumane, I need to retain to retrain
It might be a bad thing to have my brains strained
It is a fucking sad thing to have my veins slain
And I'm not complaining, I should die respiring butane

I don't know how many songs you'll be on
I guess a thousand and beyond
How many beats do I have to write my shits on?
How many songs would be titled "Yvonne"?

I'm being stupid acting like it's cool shit
To write about you in my music, I know this is bullshit
So if it does not flow to you, let the river I cry guide you
It's my words that show to you, with love, joy and pride too

Last stanza to express, last chance to confess
I'm not obsessed nor distressed, it just ain't my finesse
This poem isn't for you to walk away impressed
I drew these words just for you to lock away my depressed
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Re: Yvonne 2

Postby gutawafang » Mar 16th, '09, 17:47

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Re: Yvonne 2

Postby Slim Zaddy » Mar 16th, '09, 18:45

it was a good drop actually bro ,, first 4 lines you rhymed the same words ya 4x,, it sounds not good to me , you have some decent lines out there , i liked the lyrics, flow was okay , but not in all the verses , you had a little multies ,, it would just fit as an Audio ,, just fix the rhymes in the first 4 lines ,, content was good 2 .. 7.5/10 ,, not your best drop actually , but gd job :y:
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Re: Yvonne 2

Postby gutawafang » Mar 17th, '09, 01:04

Slim Zaddy wrote:it was a good drop actually bro ,, first 4 lines you rhymed the same words ya 4x,, it sounds not good to me , you have some decent lines out there , i liked the lyrics, flow was okay , but not in all the verses , you had a little multies ,, it would just fit as an Audio ,, just fix the rhymes in the first 4 lines ,, content was good 2 .. 7.5/10 ,, not your best drop actually , but gd job :y:

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