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Here's the attention you want

Postby James R. » Mar 18th, '09, 05:27

16 bars so you feel special. keep my name out ya vocab and learn to fucking read.

Hold up a minute, I gotta say this is a shock to me
You don’t even talk to me what’s good bitch you stalkin me?
I’m askin b, do you really think this trash is beef?
I aint Austin P so fuck a mini me of Cassidy
You talking how you’re crazy and your holdin fours
Aiyo I aint even think Canadians could go to war
Your basis is basic your whole style is stasis
You’re so average, I’ll jack into your brain like Matrix
Don’t feed me shit about how you been on hiatus
You threw shots now Im comin back got your pupils dilated
We all know how Rocky ended son Apollo kept the title
You started out decent but now your progression’s idle
You fuckin failed man that diss was disastrous
Take a few seconds thought before contractin cancer kid
And don’t write some bull shit like I won’t answer it
But if you do then please don’t post that trashy shit
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Re: Here's the attention you want

Postby Steve Spag » Mar 18th, '09, 09:58

Haha, pretty sick man. Had some really clever lines in there, a nice flow that stood out, and some very nice wordplay! I felt the last line could be fixed a little better to fit the rhyme-scheme, but it's hot shit man. Who are you dissing? Either way, good stuff, and keep at it brotha!
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Re: Here's the attention you want

Postby James R. » Mar 18th, '09, 19:50

Didn't realize this posted twice lol. But yeah it was a J Roc diss
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Re: Here's the attention you want

Postby J Roc » Mar 19th, '09, 03:40

No , Battle's Aree Lamee ^ , don't Tell me What To do With My Talent Anywayss haha
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Re: Here's the attention you want

Postby Solace » Mar 19th, '09, 21:01

Coleon wrote:or what? you'll diss me over something irrelevant or misunderstood?

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