The Greatest

[bigbuck92]

Fly like a butterfly, sting like a bee/
Ali said he was the greatest but he never met me/
Ruling the ring like I was one of the lords/
Best come with an army 'coz i'm killin' off hordes/
Swords don't serve to get no kind o' reward/
And it'll take more than a hammer if you wanna try an' break me/
Invincible, not like a vampire, you can't stake me/
Buffy's gonna be in for a rude awakenin'/

took me about 10 minutes, so maybe not too good

tell me what you think...

[Solace]

That was bad even for 10 minutes man.

[bigbuck92]

That was bad even for 10 minutes man.

bad as in crap?

[Robbie G]

Fly like a butterfly, sting like a bee

Why is that line used so often?

It wasn't terrible, but it wasn't good. try sitting down and putting a lot of time into a drop.

[bigbuck92]

Fly like a butterfly, sting like a bee

Why is that line used so often?

It wasn't terrible, but it wasn't good. try sitting down and putting a lot of time into a drop.

ok thankz man, yeh i will do

and i don't know why other people use it, but i like the quote from when Ali sed it. Just something that sticks in my head i guess?

[Solace]

That was bad even for 10 minutes man.

bad as in crap?

Yeah. I think i could do better in 5. But its all constructive crit man, hope you dont take it as offense

[bigbuck92]

That was bad even for 10 minutes man.

bad as in crap?

Yeah. I think i could do better in 5. But its all constructive crit man, hope you dont take it as offense

nah no problem, i just want 2 get feedback and improve to be honest
thanks m8

[tjb]

tht took 10 min? theres like nothing there

[Solace]

tht took 10 min? theres like nothing there

i agree

[bigbuck92]

IDK why all the hate

it's not unbearably bad but just no content and unexciting

try a topic

k thanks m8, n yh it was 10 minutes, but i wernt payin all of my attention on it, maybe i should of done? i may get something good that way

[Solace]

IDK why all the hate

it's not unbearably bad but just no content and unexciting

try a topic

k thanks m8, n yh it was 10 minutes, but i wernt payin all of my attention on it, maybe i should of done? i may get something good that way

Every time you write you have to pay attention. Dont put out shitty writing giving an excuse why it was so bad. Concentrate, focus, go to http://www.dictionary.com and look up the word of the day. Remember the definition and the spelling of the word, as long as you know it and are able to use it in a rhyme you are always 1 step closer to becoming a better writer.

[Drama Setter]

that was good for the beginning bro. good luck

[bigbuck92]

IDK why all the hate

it's not unbearably bad but just no content and unexciting

try a topic

k thanks m8, n yh it was 10 minutes, but i wernt payin all of my attention on it, maybe i should of done? i may get something good that way

Every time you write you have to pay attention. Dont put out shitty writing giving an excuse why it was so bad. Concentrate, focus, go to http://www.dictionary.com and look up the word of the day. Remember the definition and the spelling of the word, as long as you know it and are able to use it in a rhyme you are always 1 step closer to becoming a better writer.

ok fair enough, I will take a bit more time from now on, thanks for the advice again m8, I hope I put some better stuff up soon

[Slim Zaddy]

keep dropin man ,, trying will make you perfect