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Final Words

Postby Mr. Party » Mar 22nd, '09, 04:24

all the lies and all the pain, and all the sadness that she made
will never ever fade away, she is just a regret that I've gained
i just wanna choke the whore, for what the fuck she threw me for
i can't do this any more, it is time for me to close this door
i don't wanna hear her name, i never want to see her again
even if she said she loved me, it will never be the same
i don't wanna reminisce, i wanna get rid of every kiss
all this time she never loved me, even when she said she did
i don't want her in my life, i never want her back to me
i really wish i saw the signs, that led me to this tragedy
it's clear to see that i was blind, and now i look up to the sky
and talk to god to ask him why, how and when I'm due to fly
a broken heart she's choking me, she's left me with these broken things
i thought she was my opening, til i was stuck with broken wings
they said i should be moving on, my friends told me to be strong
you were the reason i was grieving, never thought that you'd be gone
i'm stuck inside this spiral surge, stuck in a suicidal curse
this may be my final verse, so listen to my final words ...
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Re: Final Words

Postby The GameKeeper » Mar 22nd, '09, 04:37

that was deep man... i liked it alot, the flow got a lil messed up in the 2nd part of the verse but oh well...... hope its not your final verse... there is nothing in this word that is worth taking your own life over, especially a girl... in time youll see, they are a dime a dozen.

9/10.. raw, great drop str8 from the heart
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Re: Final Words

Postby Xray » Mar 22nd, '09, 06:22

The GameKeeper wrote:there is nothing in this word that is worth taking your own life over, especially a girl... in time youll see, they are a dime a dozen.

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Over a billion bullets shooting from the chopper's arm
Carry a motherfucker head that I shred in Nam
I speak literally, figuratively, the prophet gone


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Re: Final Words

Postby Mr. Party » Mar 22nd, '09, 12:26

lol
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Re: Final Words

Postby mcZu » Mar 23rd, '09, 16:06

Nice drop, filled with emotion. Flow was on-point, lyrical in terms of emotion it was good.
Good drop Scotty.
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Re: Final Words

Postby Dark Blue » Mar 25th, '09, 03:10

thats pretty deep dude keep it up


The GameKeeper wrote: there is nothing in this word that is worth taking your own life over, especially a girl


so true
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