Just A Few Words

[9 Fight 1 Strong 8]

God I feel I so close only to have these Devils pull me Back
Mind full of Demonz that won't release me , Am I Trapped?
I saw a Ghost up in a Cemetery we spoke but it wasn't Friendly
Ask the Lord protect me from Friends I can handle my Enemys
As I walk this land of flames in a body scorched to the Soul
Emotions lye motionless inside an ocean full of tears that are Froze
You can follow the leader or just follow this trail of Blood
To truly know where Im at you would have to know where I was
Nothing nice, spun in rooms , no sleep Dark an Gloomy
And the only light I ever seen came from under a bulb before it pass to Me
Doing lines by the mile , no smiles and nothing Funny
Taking swim lessons with the sharks when the water was Bloody
Don't know if I've survived or just another one in line as I await my Hell
To early or To late to tell?
In a time where Lie's Lie everywhere
The Truth is rarely SPOKE
Im asking someone loose'n the noose My legs are tired of kickin'
And I don't know how much longer my fingers can stay between my neck and this ROPE

"Legen) "

[yamahiney16]

wow...that was deep

[9 Fight 1 Strong 8]

Yea I tend to go deep - I like to try and make the reader think a little bit !

Havent been on here in probably 8 years - Im Back!

[Solace]

Pretty good dude cept this entire part is bad:

To early or To late to tell?
In a time where Lie's Lie everywhere
The Truth is rarely SPOKE
Im asking someone loose'n the noose My legs are tired of kickin'
And I don't know how much longer my fingers can stay between my neck and this ROPE


But if you reworked the whole rope line that would be pretty dope. Hope to see more shit from you in the future

[9 Fight 1 Strong 8]

Appreciate that man... Yea I lost it there as far as the Flow goes , but when I write Im usually not writing for it to really flow . I get what you sayin' though !

Hope to give you all some more pretty soon.

-Deucez-

[J_cuz]

sorry man it dint appeal to me, but yea it was good

[gutawafang]

didn't like the structure. but i can still flow to it.

Not bad. I see multis. I also see the vocab used. YEAH.