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That's How You Live - FULL!

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Re: That's How You Live - FULL!

Postby dbeauluvswomen » Apr 18th, '09, 08:48

sock as a pop filter

thanks for the idea :y:

guess I just haven't discovered what my catalyst is...
battle of wits, making magic with a package of grits...
bachelors? shit...I don't even know my alphadabets
ain't a calculus wiz, but I'm good at counting the tits...
on any bountiful bitch just lemme finish downing this fifth
and I'll score like after D-Wade had just given Shaq an assist


^ Add that in there.

Anyway, I really enjoyed this piece. Good rhyme scheme. I like the robbing stuff to the gin and tonic line. It's like fuck it I'll just waste away with this instead. Looking forward to hearing this if possible. Continue the good work. :y:
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Re: That's How You Live - FULL!

Postby dbeauluvswomen » Apr 18th, '09, 08:53

lol. yeah I was bored and I liked the rhyme you had going. But good stuff you have, as always.
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Re: That's How You Live - FULL!

Postby dbeauluvswomen » Apr 18th, '09, 09:04

Appreciate it, but I have nothing that needs to be fed at this time. Don't waste yours. :y:
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Re: That's How You Live - FULL!

Postby Steve Spag » Apr 18th, '09, 10:03

Now THAT is how it's done, haha. Classic shit man; the way you matched you words made that piece flow soo well, I can really tell how it's gonna sound. I LOVED the multi's by the way. Can't wait to hear this on a beat, 'cause this is deffinetly some great work, I rekon one of your best to date!

Keep it up bro!
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Re: That's How You Live - FULL!

Postby BILI » Apr 18th, '09, 16:07

Thats nice m8. :y:
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Re: That's How You Live - FULL!

Postby mcZu » Apr 18th, '09, 17:47

Some cats will just relax, you know? Chatting with God,
fuck that, I need some cash to put some gas in my car,
fact is it's hard, I was pretty young, but it occurred to me...
it's burglary, it sucks cause I just WANT some FUCKING working heat!,
it hurts to breath, earnestly, sometimes I feel like robbing stuff,
honestly, just calm down, and watch what Jin and Tonic does...
it's not enough, if you could just relate to me I'd sever this,
irrelevance and temper that I venture with, it's evident,

I guess I just haven't discovered what my catalyst is...
battle of wits, making magic with a package of grits...
ask me to quit...(nope), I won't give in to the tempting offers...
pending projects dissipate inside the labels empty office...
filthy whores can lift you like an empty promise, fashion,
with this force of inconsistent happiness will have you back in,
a house without a mattress... Should I study for my bachelors?
chatting with a pastor... Asking "would you spare some cash sir?",
I disprove of yours.. I make em crazy like what diamonds do to girls..
soon I'll be dining with the finest foods while science rules the world...


Does two bolded lines didn't flow for me that well; however, that might be 'cause you have a certain flow in mind, which suits the beat fine. Lyrics were above average, seems you tackeled the desired concept right here, nothing to complex, but it does the trick. Hook seemed good, the bridge idem ditto. Nothing else to criticize on, good job.
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Re: That's How You Live - FULL!

Postby Arabian Shady » Apr 19th, '09, 09:19

very well written man, flow was solid, consistent thru out the piece. funny chorus 2 :y:
Sick shit
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Re: That's How You Live - FULL!

Postby gutawafang » Apr 20th, '09, 03:38

beautiful.

I like the multis. They're like so brilliant. Inspiring man. :y:
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