BATTLE FOR THE AGES.

[James R.]

Ok so look I'll tell you this much, I can appreciate the "I don't give a fuck attitude" and calling me out, so I'm gonna give you some pointers.

Your entire style is undecided. Everything you do sounds like you heard a rap song one day and thought "Shiiiit I could do that no problem" and you just wrote some lines that rhymed at the end. Unfortunately there's a lot more to it than that.

You had no flow. You know what I mean right? The bounce. You should be able to bob your head to something you wrote even if it's complete acapella. Eminem, Jay, Biggie, and Big L are great examples.

Your rhyming was VERY basic. Now being basic isn't necessarily a bad thing. You don't have to rhyme like Canibus and Immortal Technique to be considered good, but you do need to make it complex in other ways. Wordplay, metaphors, similies. Like my line "i'm pullin rhymes out my ass that's why I'm shittin on you" would be considered wordplay. Not amazing wordplay, but wordplay all the same.

And in battle rap you always want to make sure you attack your opponent. I mean I mainly only came at the fact that you're new and you're a girl, but that's the gist of what you want to do. Start writing and posting lyrics in the Creative Writing section and I'll be sure to check it out and give you feedback.

[Spyder]

so we gonna have a real battle here
and to flowerx are you attractive

[MC Anonymous]

Cmon bitches...

[Solace]

Fucking faggots don't want to get a thirteenth asshole?

Step up faggots. Step up to the generals.

[Spyder]

cmon seriously im bored

[Slim Zaddy]

i'm down for it too , but who's i'm going to battle ,, ?? it's a good idea by MC ,,

[Robbie G]

How is it fair if the 5 best battlers on the site team up?

[SajN]

Look, Me and Anon and James are going to shit on everyone, so you better not start

[Solace]

So far it seems

5 Star Generals vs. Coleon, J Roc, JMG & Slim Zaddy

Just 1 more person.

[Slim Zaddy]

So far it seems

5 Star Generals vs. Coleon, J Roc, JMG & Slim Zaddy

Just 1 more person.

with respect to you all , dont think it;s gonna be a piece of cake ,, we're good too ,, so yeah i'm ready to it ,, 1 person is needed now ,, let's get this started ,,, and for the votes , must be voted fairly ,,

[Solace]

So far it seems

5 Star Generals vs. Coleon, J Roc, JMG & Slim Zaddy

Just 1 more person.

with respect to you all , dont think it;s gonna be a piece of cake ,, we're good too ,, so yeah i'm ready to it ,, 1 person is needed now ,, let's get this started ,,, and for the votes , must be voted fairly ,,

I never said it was gunna be a piece of cake, if anything I know that all of you have very much passed my level already. I just need to play catch up

[Spyder]

haha ight 4 ppl, the 4 ones i wanted too this is gonna be good one more...ONE MORE

[mcZu]

It would be awesome if we arranged a battle against 4D, C-Game, McMaybe and Aspirine.

But I'm down for w.e.

[Slim Zaddy]

i want MoBrat on our team, that"ll be 5

it's okay ,, anyone good enough

[James R.]

So you only actually have 2 people on your team and you're waiting on confirmation from 2 more.