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1st verse off new song

Postby classthe_king » Aug 23rd, '09, 19:31

We’re in the final battle so that means most of your days are over
Your time will shatter when im done and your whole game lays molder
I am a blazing cobra when I grab the mic and spit this venom
I will remain in power; your game is sour like a citrus lemon
Blastin like a nitrous engine, grab the mic, im rocking the flow
Why you throw your hands up when I rap it ain’t stoppin the blow
Straight mockin you hoes, im special cause when I fell on this earth
God looked down, took a bow n said that is one hell of a birth
I Excel wit the verse; leave all you fuckin maggots in demise
I’m out to claw shit, come out the closet, your all faggots in disguise
Your games stagnate in these eyes, im runnin ahead as your words fall
Im actin to diss, your verse has no reaction to this, fuck the third law
Im throwin a curve ball, and you got no answer, Pedro Cerrano
You made the team, but I’m all all-state, good hands, fuck your motto

I think it's going to be called the final battle, this is all ive had time to write for now.
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby mcZu » Aug 23rd, '09, 19:37

Flow was superb, loved the last two lines and the third law line.
Keep it up. :b:
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby emzee-frenzy » Aug 23rd, '09, 19:46

fly shit man . awesome flow and wordplay :y:

I am a blazing cobra when I grab the mic and spit this venom
I will remain in power; your game is sour like a citrus lemon

like that line a lot :flower:
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby classthe_king » Aug 23rd, '09, 20:20

Thanks to both of you :worship:
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby Joe M » Aug 24th, '09, 00:30

Dope, simple as.
Flowed throughout, mutli's were good and dope wordplay.

nice piece man
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby classthe_king » Aug 24th, '09, 22:58

Thanks guys :worship:
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby BILI » Aug 24th, '09, 23:00

man its tight,really good

Straight mockin you hoes, im special cause when I fell on this earth
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby Solace » Aug 25th, '09, 02:47

For real dope, keep that shit up man! :y:
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby classthe_king » Aug 25th, '09, 02:51

wow thanks solace :flutter:
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby Solace » Aug 25th, '09, 02:58

Why thank me and not BILI :o
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby classthe_king » Aug 25th, '09, 02:59

Ohh, I swear i thought i responded to him earlier... :unsure:

THANKS BILIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII :flower: :flower: :flower:
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby Solace » Aug 25th, '09, 03:00

lies :shifty:
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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby classthe_king » Aug 25th, '09, 03:01

Solace wrote:lies :shifty:


:o I never lie! Its my fuckin computer...













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Re: 1st verse off new song

Postby BILI » Aug 25th, '09, 12:04

lmao :shifty:
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