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Emotionless

Postby Emadyville » Aug 24th, '09, 05:40

This is a song I'm recording tomorrow, the beats on Shadowville.com called Emotionless, theres kinda a hook already but here's the verses I wrote.

Opening:
Do you see me…no you don’t,
Do you know me…no you won’t,
As I open this garage the doors the facade,
And as the mirage fades I get the fuck outta dodge,
Verse 1:
The applause I applaud and I ain’t pissed off,
I just flip off the handle like a middle finger lift off,
It begins to criss cross like me after a tip off,
And hell yea it started this verse is the lift off,
As I see it daily but if I’m outspoken,
I’d rather speak honestly then be half jokin,
Cause I can be that potent, have you soakin in lotions,
If emotions involved I'll dissolve what’s broken,
I have seen a same day not a different shit,
But I’m resilient resistant and persistent with,
Everything I insist in an instant split,
From anyone on any day cause my existence is...

Verse 2:
I’ve seen what my lyrics have done, what I have become,
Just from it yeah and then some,
You loved Love Will but my will to love,
Has been shoved to the back and in front it’s Dubs,
So all the kisses and hugs were fun,
You enjoyed my pain said fuck that and put the song above me,
It’s lovely, and yeah I’m not D. Dubs I’m Bubsy,
I could say fuck you but it’s more like fuck me,
I put out a few tracks I put you on blast,
I never spoke your name lead everyone to ask,
Now every bitch wants a song like sure about what,
If your name ain’t Kelsey then keep your mouths shut,
It has me sickened, do you have thick skin?
Cause you don’t want me pickin you apart when I’m dissin,
Everything you’ve all said or did I listen,
As you’re words become ink and my pens ammunition…

Verse 3:
In Wake Up Call I dissed myself,
And when Daren is gone I won’t miss myself,
D. Dubs is what the pen gives never tentative,
I speak only the truth these facts my representative,
It’s gruesome living as a two-some,
I don’t drop bombs on verses I motherfuckin nuke em,
And go and ask who comes from these words when I spew em,
It’s D. Dubs right now cause I win some you lose some..

This was kinda personal to the extent I had a lot of shit I needed to address, I refer to some of my songs which I'm sure most of you haven't heard, but feedback appreciated.
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


I love you Daren
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Re: Emotionless

Postby Emadyville » Aug 24th, '09, 23:45

Bump
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Re: Emotionless

Postby classthe_king » Aug 24th, '09, 23:48

Lyrics were good, the flow was spectacular. I thought the first verse was the best.
Loved these lines
I have seen a same day not a different shit,
But I’m resilient resistant and persistent with,
Everything I insist in an instant split,
From anyone on any day cause my existence is...
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Emotionless

Postby Emadyville » Aug 25th, '09, 03:18

Thanks Classic and Scotty I appreciate the feed :y:

And I will make sure to let you know when the audio is good Scotty :y:
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Re: Emotionless

Postby Emadyville » Aug 25th, '09, 03:43

Coleon wrote:no one noticed Tom Chambers did this?


????????????
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Re: Emotionless

Postby Emadyville » Aug 25th, '09, 05:35

O haha ight I'ma PM you check it :y:
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