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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 6th, '09, 18:32

Yo homie I really felt that one man. Nice for real man. Good rhymin and everything. Let me know when you get it all finished I wanna see it. Keep it up man
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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Oct 8th, '09, 20:35

Really good man, real shit. :y:
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby Drama Setter » Oct 8th, '09, 21:57

eminemgirl1234 wrote:Really good man, real shit. :y:


:o real shit ?
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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 9th, '09, 02:09

good drop man....and like Yahhah said full version will be good....keep fuckin writing....oh and whats the story behind the signiture and pic of Miley
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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby gutawafang » Oct 9th, '09, 02:32

Elli's my ex too. What a coincidence. :sweating:

Basically, I liked it. Read it twice. Other than flow, I thinkt he choice of words is quite good man. ;)
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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 9th, '09, 02:49

is eli a girls name :unsure:
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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Oct 9th, '09, 16:17

Messed up. Love it! :y:
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 9th, '09, 17:47

lol ok...well i only know one Eli and thats manning and hes a little bitch...but i bet its pronounced like (e-lee) right
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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Oct 19th, '09, 15:55

krayzy wrote:For my ex yes its pronounced that way

but more commonly, i hear it pronounced Eh-lee

no not the A sound, but like the e sound in bleh


ok, nice to know.
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby shabbymind » Oct 19th, '09, 16:54

krayzy wrote:A verse of a song im making...let me know what y'all think, some real shit here

im losing my mind, with you on it, without you in my life
im too honest, was the true problem, the truth wasn't lies
whats true haunts us, and it hurts to know what is real
i really loved you, you used me, and the emotions i'd feel
to make you feel special, fuck you lets settle the beef
you aint shit, but i still loved you, you were special to me
maybe at times im a bitch, and i apologize for that
what about all this time that you fibbed, tried to act
like im stupid, you didn't love me, c'mon try to prove it
oh well i'll write my music, and you aint shit to my mic you lose bitch
if i were you i'd dislike me too i couldn't stand me as well
being such a fool dating you bitch damn you, damn you to hell
i hope you burn get revived, and burned again and fuckin suffer
its your turn motherfucker, im ending it, i never meant to be such a sucker
respond to this say whatever, i dont give a fuck what you tell me
im honest this is just me and i just wanted to say i still love you Eli...

Eli's my ex, obviously haha..



well its good..but its sound like that song

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Re: I Still Love You....

Postby Dark Blue » Oct 20th, '09, 02:39

nice dude i liked this :y:
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