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Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 8th, '09, 17:03

This is a another song about Bre...but the sad version...cause she has a boyfriend :(...this helps me cope. Heres a pic of her.

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Verse 1
Bre on a all bright pedistal,
My head is full,
Of thoughts of her,
So I write and now my lead is dull,
If my heart has a song then she sings mine,
Everyday she brings a line,
And when its winter, she's my springtime,
Her eyes are what get me,
The shade of blue, that made me do,
Something I never do, I prayed for you,
Not prayed like you were down and needed prayer,
Like my heart was full, cause Bre was there,
And around you a beat is rare,
So was my breath, short and quick,
Like a clock, with the sort of tick,
That couldn't afford a tick,
Cause time is precious,
with her each second better than the last,
Like rainy clouds, eventually the weather will pass,

Verse 2
Second verse is more worse than better,
I'm askin God why didn't I send that first damn letter,
Knowing she's with someone else, makes me start to weep,
Then when I'm around her,
Up again starts my heart beat,
Even her imperfections are perfect,
My words get,
jumbled and still nothings occured yet,
And even if I have to stair at her profile,
Even if its a thousand jokes,
All I want is a slow smile,
But its like my cars running on fumes,
And I still have to go a mile,
Your name is on my heart, never fading like a tattoo,
Never will leave, like a permanent statue,
Sometimes I look in her eyes,
Shook and surprised,
That she would even look back,


Verse 3
I know these words hurt,
But I also know, I don't deserve her,
Thinking of her, today will be my last day,
All my memories of her past away,
Even though in my mind, they asked to stay,
When I met her,
my heart was full and new,
Not its been trampled,
like the soul of a shoe,
I feel desolate, lost without a cause,
Alone, all I think about are my flaws,
I look deep into your eyes,
And my inner core cries,
While her strong spirit soars in skies,
I'm stuck trying to fly, but I only crash,
I was a burning candle, but now I'm lonely ash,
But for now I guess we'll just remain friends,
I guess I'll just ignore, the hints my brain sends,
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Oct 8th, '09, 20:25

Aw, I like it. Make another song... :'(
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

"Ignorance is your new best friend!"-Paramore
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 8th, '09, 20:47

Thanks Scot and Ems girl...means a lot and I probably will make another one soon
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 8th, '09, 21:04

Awe man when did you find that out? Yo man I love it man. I feel ya it sucks. Keep expressin it on paper homie. Keep ya head up
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

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Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 8th, '09, 22:48

Yah-hah wrote:Awe man when did you find that out? Yo man I love it man. I feel ya it sucks. Keep expressin it on paper homie. Keep ya head up

Yea I will...I'm still writing about her....she's honestly amazing
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 9th, '09, 18:48

i added a pic of her :unsure:
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby DrunkenDeath » Oct 10th, '09, 23:53

So to cope with your petty loneliness, you write songs about girls with boyfriends instead of girls who don't have boyfriends, instead of trying to get girls who don't have boyfriends. Is this how you spend your weekends?
I'm that dude.

I want to talk shit, but i'll probably get banned for it from now on :sweating:

fuckin' stalkers.
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 11th, '09, 03:30

Wow Drunkendeath you really wants to fuck with me ok... You listen to music and look for hints of Illuminati instead of thinking maybe its just regular lyrics. Instead of everything being a conspiracy why don't you quit jacking off to Illuminati youtube videos, get off your most likely overweight, cholesterol filled bloodstream, and maybe throw the frisbee around or not be jealous of my superior linguistic skill. If you knew this girl you would know why I write about her but you can't and you won't....so go give a handjob to a guy in a public restroom before you ever, EVER fucks with me...
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby DrunkenDeath » Oct 11th, '09, 04:16

You brought it upon yourself by continuing to bring up the same thing instead of contributing to conversations like a normal person, in an attempt to make fun of me. And by the way, I listen to music for the same reason anyone does, you retard. "Drunkendeath made a couple topics about illuminati. This must mean he obviously is only looking for hints for illuminati when he listens to music now!"


Yeah no.
I'm that dude.

I want to talk shit, but i'll probably get banned for it from now on :sweating:

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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 11th, '09, 06:08

No you believe it. You took "I'll be watching you" as the government sending a message to all people that they'll be watched by them...wttf shut up Drunkendeath no one likes you on this forum..... :unsure:
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby DrunkenDeath » Oct 11th, '09, 06:10

Fa-Q wrote:No you believe it. You took "I'll be watching you" as the government sending a message to all people that they'll be watched by them...wttf shut up Drunkendeath no one likes you on this forum..... :unsure:



....



you don't even defend yourself and you say completely irrelevant stuff that literally never happened. Should I feel sorry for you?
I'm that dude.

I want to talk shit, but i'll probably get banned for it from now on :sweating:

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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 11th, '09, 06:22

lol you didnt defend yourself either.... :unsure:
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby Slim Zaddy » Oct 11th, '09, 11:00

damn , i know what you feel man , you did a great job , i liked it ,, it's a relief maybe to you ,, but man be strong , cuz she just left you and she's happy with the other person, so why not you also , just let go , and find a girl and be happy with her too , lol this is up to you ,, i was jus trying to help ,, but this piece is tight ,, yeah make anther one ,, :)
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 11th, '09, 16:56

Slim Zaddy wrote:damn , i know what you feel man , you did a great job , i liked it ,, it's a relief maybe to you ,, but man be strong , cuz she just left you and she's happy with the other person, so why not you also , just let go , and find a girl and be happy with her too , lol this is up to you ,, i was jus trying to help ,, but this piece is tight ,, yeah make anther one ,, :)

Thanks Zaddy :( good feed bad topic...the song that is
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Re: Fa-Q - Another Song About A Girl

Postby DrunkenDeath » Oct 11th, '09, 17:31

....but i did...
I'm that dude.

I want to talk shit, but i'll probably get banned for it from now on :sweating:

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