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Postby Dnvl » Oct 9th, '09, 21:43

any mistake in using past simple, past perfect, etc. tense?
I don't know where to ask this so i ask you
hope you will help me ;)

Did you hear what happened to me last month? I was going to Spain on business at that time.
After i had taken my bags out of the car, i realized that i forgot my passport at home. I found a phone and telephoned home in hope that my wife hadn't gone for work yet.A minute passed but nobody had answered. I thought she wasn't at home at the moment. She had already gone. Then I thought that my wife might be in the bathroom. When some seconds passed my wife had answered. I was right she was taking a shower while I was telephoning. She quickly jumped in her car and brought me my passport to the airport. She had arrived just in time.

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Re: is there

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 9th, '09, 23:11

I'm kinda confused on what this is supposed to mean
explain?
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Re: is there

Postby Dnvl » Oct 10th, '09, 09:03

please correct if there are mistakes in using English verb tenses
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Re: is there (please answer)

Postby classthe_king » Oct 10th, '09, 18:01

I would say no, its good. Im assuming this is for school so the weird little mistakes won't matter.
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Re: is there (please answer)

Postby Dnvl » Oct 10th, '09, 18:09

what are the weird little mistakes???
it's very important for me !!!!
why don't you point at them ?
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Re: is there (please answer)

Postby classthe_king » Oct 10th, '09, 18:48

just that, i pretty sure telephoning isnt a word.
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Re: is there (please answer)

Postby Dnvl » Oct 10th, '09, 19:37

classthe_king wrote:just that, i pretty sure telephoning isnt a word.


it's not my text
it's an exercise in the textbook
but what about tenses????
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Re: is there (please answer)

Postby classthe_king » Oct 10th, '09, 19:39

everything was fine with the tenses.
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Re: is there (please answer)

Postby Dnvl » Oct 11th, '09, 19:58

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