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Some light Work , Light Breeze..LightBright

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Some light Work , Light Breeze..LightBright

Postby J Roc » Oct 12th, '09, 18:23

These Clones All Love Me.. But I Feel Like a Cheater, cuz i'm Known to Love Weed
And Coleon Couldn't get his "Pay Back" If He Loaned Some Money :'(
You Know Roc's About Pun's, When Eveyrhting i Say I Randomly Talk About Stuff??
Ur About As Fake Looking As... a Dude With a Soulja Boy Avy Talking bout Gun's :whistle:
if u Pay Coin's? Holl-Up Let Me Roll-Up & Make Joint's
u Having Dope-Rapping Wont-Happen Like Ur Aim Point's
Cuz Only thing ur "Hand-Held" Was a Game Boy... O_o
This is J Roc Signing On, And Speaking Fluently
Taking Tr Back to the Way's It Used To Be
Here's the rap scene i hope ur all Ready For
Am i the only one who remember's 07 Anymore????
Back When i Was Wack But i Loved This Shit
Back When i didn't win battle's but i Up'd My Shit
Back Before I Was One of The Greatest
Back When 4D's Vocab Was highly Anticipated
An hour Ago I Started Reading My Old Shit
And To Tell u the truth, I Ain't Beating My Old Shit
I dun blame u coleon, Even i woulda Stole My Line's
Shit i Made a Year Ago would Blow Your Mind
Forreal ;) .................................
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Re: Some light Work , Light Breeze..LightBright

Postby Steve Spag » Oct 12th, '09, 18:28

Well you started off pretty strong but I felt that the more it went on the more simplistic it got. Dope rhymes in there though, you always have a strong vocab. aswell and that doesn't exclude this piece.

Keep it up dude, you are one of the few I actually enjoy reading from!
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Re: Some light Work , Light Breeze..LightBright

Postby J Roc » Oct 12th, '09, 18:32

Thank's Steve i appreciate it lol :y: ....
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Re: Some light Work , Light Breeze..LightBright

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 12th, '09, 19:07

:boxing: Homie always got them punches :p
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


Nundea Mekeze comin soon May 4th
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Re: Some light Work , Light Breeze..LightBright

Postby Relapse.LP » Oct 13th, '09, 05:36

I love your style. It cracks me up. XD

Especially with all those smiley faces and shit. Sounds like you're stoned... :D
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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