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I come before you

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 14th, '09, 23:06

Inspired by "Thanks" by fish

I come before you broken,
My hearts a bit torn open pourin out emotions like the ocean,
The worlds so fast and I'm slow motion,
To taste this potion leaves me hopeless,
I come before you empty,
I've poured out everything in me so as soon as you hit me I'm dizzy with no one to lift me,
Erase all things in me and simply give me the will to overcome this envy,
I come before you on my knees,
Because I no longer believe that I alone can achieveany of these things that I need,
I just continue to bleed and sppedily, greedily eat up what you're feedin me,
I come before you so far from innocent,
Thoughts of you are so distant in this cocoon I've hidden in,
I've been lost and cut off so often I can no longer remember it,
I come before you confused,
I'm broken and bruised my heart ripped open for you,
Over and over I'm used all I know is to lose and so far truth has my lups turned blue,
I come before you a child,
I've run over a hundred miles yet I'm stunned for awhile that you wonder if I'll ever give you more than some-what a smile,
I come beofre you humble,
On every street I stumble can only speak in a mumble so weak when I fumble,
I'm weak yet I rumble till I beat every beast in the jungle,
I come before you willingly,
You're filling me with silly dreams they're killing me,
I'm signalling that I'm finishing each memory so menacing,
I come beofre you not on your checklist,
I'm not your best it's a fact that I'm often reckless,
Blinded by this necklace like I'm blind myself it,
A fact that my wrestling match with God on the stairway to heaven was ended when I submitted in seconds.
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: I come before you

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 15th, '09, 01:22

Damn Just you be dropped er'ryday....and damn this was longer than Gutaws thank you and this was inspired by it....good drop but not as good as others lol
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Re: I come before you

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 15th, '09, 02:21

Fa-Q wrote:Damn Just you be dropped er'ryday....and damn this was longer than Gutaws thank you and this was inspired by it....good drop but not as good as others lol


Yeah aint much else to do up here besides write. tryin to get the material for the book done so I can start organizing page numbers and stuff like that ya know. Yeah just kinda one of those I had a thought and wrote bout it ya know. Good lookin out
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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Re: I come before you

Postby gutawafang » Oct 16th, '09, 03:16

I love the idea of using the "I come" in almost every sentence. :y:

Dope multis. :happy:

Glad I inspired you. :p

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On every street I stumble can only speak in a mumble so weak when I fumble,
I'm weak yet I rumble till I beat every beast in the jungle, :y: :y: :y:

Keep the dope-ness up man. :worship:
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Re: I come before you

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 16th, '09, 08:10

gutawafang wrote:I love the idea of using the "I come" in almost every sentence. :y:

Dope multis. :happy:

Glad I inspired you. :p

Stylish line:
On every street I stumble can only speak in a mumble so weak when I fumble,
I'm weak yet I rumble till I beat every beast in the jungle, :y: :y: :y:

Keep the dope-ness up man. :worship:


ha yeah I gtocha man :y:
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"Red hand I use to reach deep in my dark quiver,
Arrow so big the fuckin bones in ya arm splinter
Fuckin crazy I'll stick my hand throgh ya hearts center,
With sharp scissors the words Native Pride gets carved in her,
"-Yah-hah

Trimss wrote:Your dog is cute, your tattoo fucking rocks, you can fight and your baby have a big dick.
Your life is cool bro lol :y:


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