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Girl of 6th floor

Postby gutawafang » Oct 16th, '09, 03:17

Thrice on the elevator, I smiled at her
Once, her bag’s not zipped, I gave her file to her
Cuz it fell out the bag, then she smiled at me
I got nothing to say, and it’s the style of me
My thoughts of you like thoughts of proposing
Supposing we got together, I said supposing
I wouldn’t need parents to stick their nose in
Because my love for her is permanently frozen
I’ve been telling you, it’s not three letters spelling you
6 letters describing you, million times I’m yelling you
Beauty’s the word, you exist for eyes to transfer
If you think you ain’t, then it’s lies I mastered
Because this is the rhyme to speak to you like preachers
Let my love heal your painful scars and your stitches
Let me be the shining star you made your wishes to
And you’ll be thinking of trees in the beaches and fishes too

Like the roses, your scent so beautiful, I’m admired
Your face so smooth even a magnet gets attracted
Like a bee to a nectar, I need you to build a home
Feed a family, you the factor, the end of being alone
Meeting you more than thrice, I really fell for that smile
I admit, and I swear I can never handle that pile
Of occurrences, coincidences, luck, and credibility
I don’t have the courage to face up to my disability
Cuz I need to talk to you, but I can’t walk to you
Every smile you throw to me, I’m dodging you
Sorry to be such a coward, these are the words to say
If you’re going away, I’ll make sure you stay
Listen to me, cuz this is the confession to you
Rap’s just the method, but a profession to you
I don’t do this for money, I’m just expressing my love
I hope that was a minute of reading’s worth

I guess I'll write a 16-64 bars per day. :sweating:
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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby emzee-frenzy » Oct 16th, '09, 06:26

good job fishy :y: i like it :flower:
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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby Yah-hah » Oct 16th, '09, 08:18

I dig it man nice concept. Good drop Fish
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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Oct 16th, '09, 16:10

That's cute! :y: Love it!
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

Malina a.k.a Mickey

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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby gutawafang » Oct 17th, '09, 03:06

emzee-frenzy wrote:good job fishy :y: i like it :flower:

Thanks for the flower. :)

Yah-hah wrote:I dig it man nice concept. Good drop Fish

Thank you man for checking it out. :happy:

eminemgirl1234 wrote:That's cute! :y: Love it!

:worship: Thanks.
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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby Solace » Oct 18th, '09, 05:31

Really liked it bro :smoking:
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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby Slim Zaddy » Oct 18th, '09, 13:57

it's sick man
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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby gutawafang » Oct 19th, '09, 03:11

Solace wrote:Really liked it bro :smoking:

Thanks homie. :y:


Slim Zaddy wrote:it's sick man

Woohoo! :worship:
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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby Relapse.LP » Oct 19th, '09, 03:13

The girl in your avatar is cute! I love it! :y: :y: :y: :y: :y:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby gutawafang » Oct 19th, '09, 03:22

da.relapse.lp wrote:The girl in your avatar is cute! I love it! :y: :y: :y: :y: :y:

ahahahahaha. thanks :flower:
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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby macdaddy019967 » Oct 19th, '09, 09:36

wow nice :y:
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Re: Girl of 6th floor

Postby gutawafang » Oct 19th, '09, 09:41

macdaddy019967 wrote:wow nice :y:

:happy:
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