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Long Kiss Goodnight (MC Anon Response) - Yah-hah ft. Relapse

Postby Relapse.LP » Oct 17th, '09, 08:48

Yah-hah wrote:Decapitate? You lack the faith to de-activate my passive traits/
My passion states your action makes even my thunder gods come down to smack ya face/
15? ha seems like your new to big shit and I don't lose to bitches/
Only way your beatin' me is if you use your fist in the same way you do when your computer glitches/
Useless bitches just stop, so the CW can have some useful business/
You're goin' quick see you're in your 5th speed tryin' to stick me but you're 15 so you're new to stick shift/
I'm a pacifist but my passion is to grab the clip and crack the whip with a fascist twitch/
MC Anonymous is synonymous with novice bitch/
It's obvious Anonymous hasn't accomplished an honest cent/
People respectin' me for writing sick bro that's just common sense/
I'm probably fit to hit you off the fence and leave you where the thunder was/
Biting J Roc's punches like you were hungry for uppercuts...*light work*/
Declaring your "throne" to everyone over one of my love song threads/
So you come and diss me from what someone else said/
Not so sure this is right don't fight an opponent you've never seen/
I'm a bullet-proof tiger with razor-sharp claws and steel wings/

da.relapse.lp wrote:The final massacre like a tidal massive surge... your spinal has to hurt/
A vaginal ass to burn... Anon ashamed of not being the Creative Writer/
Not the native fighter, but a basic biter; his rhymes sedative... a liar/
The probative crier can't prove shit... so it explains the quality of his music/
His raps he puked it that soon did burst; dissing Yah-Hah for owning the kingdom/
A phony... so bring it; droning and singing his raps so we groaning, not thinking/
Thesaurus he sleeps with studying; keeps it, cuddling... half your rhymes make no sense/
I'll ache defense like you're fake offense... you need to wake your fence/
Anon is Drake but four pence; too late for this... It smells like jealousy?/
Hell's my specialty... tell me mellowly you're not fazed by the spelling bee/
Can't text the facts so you rant perplex acts and pant from max attacks/
You only concentrate on multies... get bondage-raped from more rhymes with the fag "Mac"/
Choose opponent at random? Fuse Anon and "Phantom" and get an MC writing "Opera"/
Mainstream like Oprah but the same thing like copiers; your brain thinks like Power-Off/
Please, don't impress us with vocab like it's a science class, but still lying facts/
I know you're defying rap but not defining that... your crying ass sounds like a dying act/
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Long Kiss Goodnight (MC Anon Response) - Yah-hah ft. Relapse

Postby macdaddy019967 » Oct 17th, '09, 09:07

What a cute collab
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Postby Tranquil » Oct 17th, '09, 10:07

macdaddy019967 wrote:What a cute collab

LMFAO
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Re: Long Kiss Goodnight (MC Anon Response) - Yah-hah ft. Relapse

Postby MC Anonymous » Oct 17th, '09, 11:58

Hmm... lyrically from Yah-Hah it was nothing special. For a diss your info has to be correct, and your info was not, I am 16 not 15. A lot of the multies were forced as hell and the structure looked horrendous to the eye. Although the flow seemed to work a little bit if you put it on audio there would be no way in hell that it would flow correctly to a beat. I've seen you do way better then this, kinda disappointed that you went weak on me. :n:

Relapse took this one, pretty decent personals in here, I liked the CW references and thought he did do what a diss was supposed to, attack an opponent. (meaning me) Good job with the multies although the over use of them made the flow really hard to follow. I think you could have attacked me better also, but that's just my opinion.

Decent diss, :y:
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Postby gutawafang » Oct 17th, '09, 13:20

Eminemislegend wrote:
macdaddy019967 wrote:What a cute collab

LMFAO


Anyways, I think it's pretty good. :y:
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Re: Long Kiss Goodnight (MC Anon Response) - Yah-hah ft. Relapse

Postby J Roc » Oct 17th, '09, 14:46

da.relapse.lp wrote:
Yah-hah wrote:Decapitate? You lack the faith to de-activate my passive traits/
My passion states your action makes even my thunder gods come down to smack ya face/
15? ha seems like your new to big shit and I don't lose to bitches/
Only way your beatin' me is if you use your fist in the same way you do when your computer glitches/
Useless bitches just stop, so the CW can have some useful business/
You're goin' quick see you're in your 5th speed tryin' to stick me but you're 15 so you're new to stick shift/
I'm a pacifist but my passion is to grab the clip and crack the whip with a fascist twitch/
MC Anonymous is synonymous with novice bitch/
It's obvious Anonymous hasn't accomplished an honest cent/
People respectin' me for writing sick bro that's just common sense/
I'm probably fit to hit you off the fence and leave you where the thunder was/
Biting J Roc's punches like you were hungry for uppercuts...*light work*/
Declaring your "throne" to everyone over one of my love song threads/
So you come and diss me from what someone else said/
Not so sure this is right don't fight an opponent you've never seen/
I'm a bullet-proof tiger with razor-sharp claws and steel wings/

da.relapse.lp wrote:The final massacre like a tidal massive surge... your spinal has to hurt/
A vaginal ass to burn... Anon ashamed of not being the Creative Writer/
Not the native fighter, but a basic biter; his rhymes sedative... a liar/
The probative crier can't prove shit... so it explains the quality of his music/
His raps he puked it that soon did burst; dissing Yah-Hah for owning the kingdom/
A phony... so bring it; droning and singing his raps so we groaning, not thinking/
Thesaurus he sleeps with studying; keeps it, cuddling... half your rhymes make no sense/
I'll ache defense like you're fake offense... you need to wake your fence/
Anon is Drake but four pence; too late for this... It smells like jealousy?/
Hell's my specialty... tell me mellowly you're not fazed by the spelling bee/
Can't text the facts so you rant perplex acts and pant from max attacks/
You only concentrate on multies... get bondage-raped from more rhymes with the fag "Mac"/
Choose opponent at random? Fuse Anon and "Phantom" and get an MC writing "Opera"/
Mainstream like Oprah but the same thing like copiers; your brain thinks like Power-Off/
Please, don't impress us with vocab like it's a science class, but still lying facts/
I know you're defying rap but not defining that... your crying ass sounds like a dying act/


lol .... iunoo whut to say that was flames .... Yah Hah u just got a new respect from me, Same with Relapse .... that's tha first drop in a long time that motivated me to go back to how i used to Write lol .... 3 Thumb's up that was viscious ... Anon's cool with me but damn
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Re: Long Kiss Goodnight (MC Anon Response) - Yah-hah ft. Relapse

Postby Le Tunisien » Oct 17th, '09, 15:37

nice diss :flower: fuck an mcAnn :smoking:
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Postby Solace » Oct 17th, '09, 17:18

Pretty good, Relapse extremely outshined you though imo.
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Postby macdaddy019967 » Oct 17th, '09, 21:31

You only concentrate on multies... get bondage-raped from more rhymes with the fag "Mac"


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Postby Relapse.LP » Oct 17th, '09, 21:44

Bring it. :smoking:
Yo, from the first to the last of it; delivery is passionate/
The whole and not the half of it; vocab and not the math of it/
Projectile that them blasted with; accurate assassin shit/
Me and Kweli close like... Bethlehem and Nazareth/


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Re: Long Kiss Goodnight (MC Anon Response) - Yah-hah ft. Relapse

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 18th, '09, 04:20

Hmmm....I thought both verses were tight....was this a random diss or did I miss something
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