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Don't abort me

Postby gutawafang » Oct 19th, '09, 03:14

I want to stop swimming, I want to get ashore
I want to quit dreaming, be a soldier, I'm set to war
Show me the sunshine on your face, as soon as I land
And do it in your ways, as soon as you grab my hand
Wrap me in comfort, and then bath me like a pet
Sing a lullaby to show the path for me you set
Then point me to the brightness of the presence of a dad
Don't disappoint me cuz this life is all I have
I'm not the tomatoes you get rid of in your Subway Sandwich
Why you having thoughts of killing me? Damn, bitch
You're my mother, no matter how young you is
I want to be born Mom, you can't do possibly do this
I want to see the stars, and celebrate a life of a human
I want to ride your car, and have a wife, there's no U-turn
There's no going back, you get rid of me, it's your regret
Why don't you accept me like how fate can't reset?

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Re: Don't abort me

Postby Relapse.LP » Oct 19th, '09, 03:17

gutawafang wrote:I want to stop swimming, I want to get ashore
I want to quit dreaming, be a soldier, I'm set to war
Show me the sunshine on your face, as soon as I land
And do it in your ways, as soon as you grab my hand
Wrap me in comfort, and then bath me like a pet
Sing a lullaby to show the path for me you set
Then point me to the brightness of the presence of a dad
Don't disappoint me cuz this life is all I have
I'm not the tomatoes you get rid of in your Subway Sandwich
Why you having thoughts of killing me? Damn, bitch
You're my mother, no matter how young you is
I want to be born Mom, you can't do possibly do this
I want to see the stars, and celebrate a life of a human
I want to ride your car, and have a wife, there's no U-turn
There's no going back, you get rid of me, it's your regret
Why don't you accept me like how fate can't reset?

:)


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Re: Don't abort me

Postby DƎRDYPK » Oct 19th, '09, 03:19

Fish displays the poetry in motion :y: :flower:
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby gutawafang » Oct 19th, '09, 03:24

Thanks PK and Relapse. :happy:
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby Fa-Q » Oct 19th, '09, 03:27

Was this your protest of abortion? Good shit...I liked it all except the random subway sandwich lol
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby gutawafang » Oct 19th, '09, 03:31

Fa-Q wrote:Was this your protest of abortion? Good shit...I liked it all except the random subway sandwich lol

LOL. Thanks man. :y:
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby gutawafang » Oct 19th, '09, 07:54

bump :)
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby BILI » Oct 20th, '09, 17:57

Yeah its pretty good homie,and that sandwich made me laugh :y:
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby Slimm » Oct 20th, '09, 18:34

huh babys that young cant write! OMFGZ HOW IS THIS POSSIBLE?
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby gutawafang » Oct 21st, '09, 01:32

BILI wrote:Yeah its pretty good homie,and that sandwich made me laugh :y:

:D Thanks for checking it out homie.

Slimm wrote:huh babys that young cant write! OMFGZ HOW IS THIS POSSIBLE?

Yeah, it's a cute baby. Thanks for checking it out man. :happy:
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby gutawafang » Oct 21st, '09, 01:39

Coleon wrote:I like how original you write, good shit, you'd make some dope choruses :shifty: (see ya soon haha)

I tried ta flow it and the only prob was you didn't match up the amount of syllables in each line, like ones were too long and ones were too short

keep it up Guta :y: you'll find your way

I'll take note of the number of syllables cuz I get what you mean man. I don't usually write to a beat in the first place. :sweating: I'll definitely take that in.

And yeah, dope choruses. :shifty:

:smoking: Thanks for checking it out man.
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby Solace » Oct 22nd, '09, 21:37

I'm not the tomatoes you get rid of in your Subway Sandwich

That ruined it for me but without that it was pretty good. Keep it up :y:
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby mcZu » Oct 23rd, '09, 01:02

Besides the tomatoes line, it's dope. Keep it up/Spotting.
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Re: Don't abort me

Postby gutawafang » Oct 23rd, '09, 02:33

Thanks for reading, Solace and Zu. :)
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