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my first rap

Postby Good For Nothing » Oct 19th, '09, 21:33

ok before you read on i want you to know that i am one of em's biggest fans ( 4 real ) but this rap is about how i want r2 to be and how i feel about his new accents and new track taking my ball which was weak.

this is only the first verse dont know if i will continue.

okay critics cast your vote :)


Okay shady bring it back,
back to that 8 mile style anything else is wack
rap needs your raw style and thats a fact,
if drugs is what you need then get back on that crack
and when i say crack i dont mean bruno
sucking on his nuts was a bad idea you know
we want that hustlers hunger and that bleached blonde attitude
rap like you was younger and maybe start another rapper feud
buy a fish from a monger run with it and smack a dude
grab a girl tongue her she was underage so you get sued
what happened to the ignorant white high rapper dude ?

Now don't get it twisted im a big fan of shady
but when was the last time he abused a fucking lady
when did he decide to refuse from being crazy
what makes me so angry is that i know he can do better
Fuck the V homie make it E for Vendetta
or is the commercial rap making the labels pussy wetter ?
look shady we know your still capable
our ears are opened and are damn sure rape-able
but know more accents, is that your best ? ; debatable.
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Re: my first rap

Postby Dark Blue » Oct 20th, '09, 02:46

great job on your first rap :y: i didn't think it was to bad at all
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Re: my first rap

Postby DƎRDYPK » Oct 20th, '09, 02:48

i liked it :y: :b:
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Re: my first rap

Postby emzee-frenzy » Oct 20th, '09, 11:12

yeah man for your first oneis was quite dope, keep writing, i'll keep my eye on you for more shit :y:
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