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Postby macdaddy019967 » Oct 19th, '09, 18:45

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Re: Last Drop

Postby DƎRDYPK » Oct 19th, '09, 18:47

:o that was crazy
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Re: Last Drop

Postby macdaddy019967 » Oct 19th, '09, 18:51

DerdyPK wrote::o that was crazy

thanks for the feed man wanted to make my last drop the best i could
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Re: Last Drop

Postby MC Anonymous » Oct 19th, '09, 18:54

Jesus christ. Unexpected. However it does look like you jacked my wordplay style :(
I liked this shit though, it's dope. :y:
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Re: Last Drop

Postby shabbymind » Oct 19th, '09, 18:58

macdaddy019967 wrote:
DerdyPK wrote::o that was crazy

thanks for the feed man wanted to make my last drop the best i could



well flow is good..rhyme are good...but thats it... i mean you only prooved you could put rhymes together


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Re: Last Drop

Postby macdaddy019967 » Oct 19th, '09, 19:00

MC Anonymous wrote:Jesus christ. Unexpected. However it does look like you jacked my wordplay style :(
I liked this shit though, it's dope. :y:

thanks mc anon
lol at jacking your wordplay style
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Re: Last Drop

Postby mcZu » Oct 19th, '09, 19:05

It's dope, flow is kinda choppy because you go from two syllable words to 6 syllable words. Keep it up.
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Re: Last Drop

Postby macdaddy019967 » Oct 19th, '09, 22:35

mcZu wrote:It's dope, flow is kinda choppy because you go from two syllable words to 6 syllable words. Keep it up.

nah i think this is my last thanks for the feed though :smoking:
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Re: Last Drop

Postby classthe_king » Oct 19th, '09, 22:41

I honestly can't read it when you write it like that. Sorry, but the first couple lines are dope :flower: I wish you'd keep writing.
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Re: Last Drop

Postby Solace » Oct 19th, '09, 22:44

shabbymind wrote:well flow is good..rhyme are good...but thats it... i mean you only prooved you could put rhymes together

He set out to rhyme. He proved he could put rhymes together. I think he did perfectly fine, so how are you actually critiquing this?

Dope piece :y:
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Re: Last Drop

Postby Dark Blue » Oct 20th, '09, 02:41

DerdyPK wrote: :o that was crazy


very crazy
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Re: Last Drop

Postby macdaddy019967 » Oct 20th, '09, 03:12

thanks Solace and Lil Jonizzle :smoking:
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Re: Last Drop

Postby gutawafang » Oct 20th, '09, 03:27

Your last drop? Damn, I was looking forward to more. :(

So fucking dope. :smoking:
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