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Postby shabbymind » Oct 20th, '09, 02:46

i see the light at the end of the tunel
But where but where does it end?
Psyche weakened beside my life darkened
I see the light at the end of the tunel
But where does does it end?


Im not going to complain about what i dont have in life
God decided my path to be the hardest you ever see in times
am allowed no dreams because every ladder is too high to climb
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Postby Spyder » Oct 20th, '09, 03:03

probably shouldnt of posted til u get some more....
but as far as i can see not good man, need multies and internals all that
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Postby gutawafang » Oct 20th, '09, 03:29

Not a rap to me. It sounds like a poem. Though it's not too poetic.
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