Blood From a Stone

[paulmichael89]

just found this site... pretty dope.... anyway id love to hear some opinions on this, i call it "blood from a stone"


I’m restricted by cryptic visions of destruction and cataclysms
Sadistic killings delivered with vicious precision
A nation of a million civilians cremated beyond recognition
Take a minute to sit and listen to television depictions
of men and women relinquished from positions of power
In an instant only under an hour
No bullshittin’ no kiddin’
The equivalent of a million little children imprinted on a milk carton missin'
Reminiscent of Hiroshima with zero FEMA to save us
Bravery’s a must
cause' this is greater than we as a people
and dismiss all your notions of capturing back your home turf through retaliation
Our battalions been dismantled along with our nation
And the sad reality is the fact of the matter
That there attacks have occurred through the fat of our land
It’s inevitable, an indelible mark will be left on our planet
Today or tomorrow, years from now you cant plan it
Calendars vanished
Though in the aftermath of the havoc
I predict a more intimate habitat to inhabit
Racial boundaries disbanded
Living with a revisionist’s history
To be able to look past these ass backwards standards
Find poetic symmetry
And look beyond the hue
to realize we’re all man

[gutawafang]

Definitely hot shit man. FUCKING DOPE vocabulary you have. And you know how to use syllables and multis to make it flow man.

Structure could be improved.

You got skills I think.

[Emadyville]

Impressive except for some structure issues, very good piece

[classthe_king]

yeah, structure is off, rhymes arent very good at all either. You got grade vocab though.

[Nancy08]

Yeah, you have to choose a good manner of arrangement, I think
... But, it made sense.

[paulmichael89]

thanks for the compliments

and yea i agree with the structure issues... it sounds a lot better in my head than it reads on paper