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If I Died Tonight

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If I Died Tonight

Postby MC Anonymous » Oct 23rd, '09, 21:41

If I died tonight
Would you people even cry
would you even try
to save me or believe the lies
that their feeding, why?
I never ever did you wrong
all I wanna do is get along
is that so wrong?
I live inside a spectrum
a spectrum of energy that I'm stepping
the weapons I'm using to live
are dissecting
The blood in the tissue
the tissue of living
the living is breathing
the issues receiving
are teething my weeping
I'm alone, com-positioning A lyric
So you could hear it
and understand my morbid spirit
The scars, the pain, the rain, the clouds
the same with rounds
it's just blowing my brain to drown
I step into this life with broken feet
I broke defeat
ended up sleeping, sulking in sleet
Opening sleeves
and I'm choking on these, lies
you spoken to me
My life isn't worth shit
puttin hope into me

If I died tonight
Would you people even cry
would you even try
to save me or believe the lies
that their feeding, why?
I never ever did you wrong
all I wanna do is get along
is that so wrong? x2

I've been abused, used
and emotionally scarred
oceans of bars, couldn't flow
like the motions of stars
The moon orbits the earth
the stars come and disperse
the gun in my hertz
so I can have fun in the dirt
And astral project
with my spirit form to a place
Where worms can not taste
my brain's dirt or trace.
Images of suicide, and who am I
for you to cry about, it's just a homicide
from homie who needed to die
With the iron in his hand
It's desire that he had
to be a better man
let the world know he's sad
Cause' every body watchin' and waiting
anticipating the pain then
exasperating my mind
with what they are saying
Cause' they hate me,
they wanna see me suffer
It's fills them with glee, when I'm in my internal slumber
Here's something for you,
this is my suicide letter,
You better remember you were the cause of my embers

If I died tonight
Would you people even cry
would you even try
to save me or believe the lies
that their feeding, why?
I never ever did you wrong
all I wanna do is get along
is that so wrong? X2

To My family, I apologize
for all the lies, for my calls of cries
I'm appalled at why
that I didn't do this sooner,
send my spirit to lunar
bases, and skewer faces with cases
of paranormal bruises
You see, I'll be haunting you
inside your sleep, your eyes will weep
you'll try to creep, your lives I'll reap
And see you in the afterlife,
filled with scattered strife, and battered knives
and demons laughing at your bastard life
Yes I'm angry, Yes I've had it
with you stupid fucking faggots
that's why I'm chillaxin' with maggots
getting dirt for practice
Life isn't good, Life isn't sweet,
Walking on concrete with heat
getting smacked on both of my feet
It's the pain that I'm leaving,
It's the rain that I'm bleeding
in the page I am seeping
and for vain fucking reasons

If I died tonight
Would you people even cry
would you even try
to save me or believe the lies
that their feeding, why?
I never ever did you wrong
all I wanna do is get along
is that so wrong? X2
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: If I Died Tonight

Postby Solace » Oct 23rd, '09, 22:02

Didn't like how the chorus is like "sampled" from the first verse, made the first verse seem repetitive when I read it again. There was a lot of emotion in this one. You kept the flow nice, the diction used was ace. My favourite verse was a tie between first and third, I didn't like the second much in relation to the others. Keep it up bro :y:
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Re: If I Died Tonight

Postby classthe_king » Oct 24th, '09, 05:26

Dang, really liked this. I thought it was all dope on pretty much the same level, but the begining of the second verse made me say wow. I agree with Solace on the chorus though.
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Re: If I Died Tonight

Postby gutawafang » Oct 24th, '09, 05:28

Usual rhyme patterns. Dope as usual. :worship:

I like the second verse the most man. :y:
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Re: If I Died Tonight

Postby AfterLyfe207 » Oct 26th, '09, 02:45

Shits pretty dope homie. :y:
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You got your weapon check You got your ammo check
You got the filthy slut pinup calender yes You got the food check
You got supplies check you got the trees so we can get high?

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Re: If I Died Tonight

Postby MC Anonymous » Oct 26th, '09, 14:59

:worship: :worship: :worship:
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: If I Died Tonight

Postby Sophie » Oct 26th, '09, 15:42

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:reminds me of .. a JLS song called 'beat again'

If I died
Yeah would you come
To my funeral
Would you cry
Would you feel some regret
That we didn't try
Or would you fall apart
The same as I


lol .. resemblance :shifty:


LOL JLS...i can't remember how that goes..the only bit I remember is..that my heart won't beat again...and that's the bit that i keep singing in my head now -__- and that's all i remember of the song lool. anyway, i doubt they've made it across to the us yet surely? (i may be wrong).

Anywhom, i like it :y:
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Re: If I Died Tonight

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Oct 26th, '09, 16:04

If you died tonight, huh? Not your best one ever...
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

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