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[[[[[[last draw thats it]]]]]]]]]

Postby Pte.Pelkey. » Nov 15th, '09, 11:52

Yo, Ayo, Hey you MOjito, BORitto, Allah mamacita
I'll make your mom my Sinorita!
Aribbaaaaa! She'll be screaming, I'm teasing
like your cuzin Jami, oh ya baby, Those titties drove me crazy.

The book of lives
& demon spies
mistreating wives
while the halo cries
I say stay on your feet
bcuz they feed on the weak
def. don't be afraid when they speak.
turn the other cheek and pray.

I'm deterotating fading
slowly out of existance
past relatives who passed on
experianced this and im still a kid
thinkin this is my death bed
and still im hard headed
hot blooded, with no reason to be
I havent gone through nothin hard
no need for me to try and act it
see its too far to reach when u dont
pick up ur feet.

I won't change for noone
I'm mentally ill
I kno you notice it
I still can't comprehend
I still can't understand
what does this mean?
I ain't crazy nah

will I answer when god calls
how about when madness hits its peek
killn' em all softly, I couldn't do it.
honestly, Its not in me to take a life.

Brand new me, Channels by you

petty thefts still jackin shit
you really gotta fucking grow up kid
be a man, stand tall head high speak up
fuck gettin high, drinking up
get your damn money up
get laid find urself a girl
tell ur mom u love her
hug her, travel the world
smile at strangers
tell stories do wild things
is that life?
or what i think it should be like
why should i impress my friends?

whats it all worth?
making history and what not
having a job for 40 sum odd years
then sittin back retired sippin beers
till you shrivel and die.

Sketchy
he's a freak
not normal it seems
crooked teeth
not very loud all the time
keeps to himself
a drifter
social outcast
taken back
an observer
a learner
itchy heart
skipping beats
club scenes
he's humpty dumpty.

I do 4 me you do 4 you
I do 4 me you do for you
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Re: [[[[[[last draw thats it]]]]]]]]]

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 15th, '09, 11:55

(((((((()))))))
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Re: [[[[[[last draw thats it]]]]]]]]]

Postby Pte.Pelkey. » Nov 15th, '09, 11:56

what r u tryin to prove it got ur attention didnt it? little prick
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Postby Fa-Q » Nov 15th, '09, 11:59

Pte.Pelkey. wrote:what r u tryin to prove it got ur attention didnt it? little prick

Attention in a bad way dumbfuck.....don't you have a vagina to wear over your head cunt
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Postby Pte.Pelkey. » Nov 15th, '09, 12:05

bad attnetion? no such thing kid, what? ar eu tryin to be funny? be rational, talk normal man stop making these gay ass jokes cause they do nothing to me and any one reading it just thinks ur a fuckin prick tryin to jump on board with my insane intellect. and hate it cause u cant agree that I got interesting things to say. fuck off kid. get off my dick.
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Re: [[[[[[last draw thats it]]]]]]]]]

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 15th, '09, 12:40

Pte.Pelkey. wrote:bad attnetion? ar eu tryin to be funny? any one reading it just thinks ur a fuckin prick tryin to jump on board with my insane intellect. and hate it cause u cant agree that I got interesting things to say. fuck off kid. get off my dick.



Haha first off insane intellect....can you spell and type or do you have fuckin knubs for hands.....and I'm not being a prick your rhymes suck and maybe I would have given you a chance but you had all of the unnecessary ((((_)))) so I immediately said fuck this kid. And lol do you know what the term "off my dick" means....it means I do like you and its very apparent I don't so f-f-f-f-fuck off
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Re: [[[[[[last draw thats it]]]]]]]]]

Postby BILI » Nov 15th, '09, 14:53

It aint that bad,but try more multies :y:
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Re: [[[[[[last draw thats it]]]]]]]]]

Postby Wic Kid » Nov 15th, '09, 15:21

Is this rap lyrics? :confusion:
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Postby MC Anonymous » Nov 15th, '09, 15:36

You fucking suck, dumbfuck.
LMFAO@ Brittney, bitch looking worse than a chupacabra mixed with a broken down coyote. You're disgusting ugly, so ugly in fact, my brain simultaneously exploded while processing how bitterly grotesque you look. I would much rather stick ice picks into the walls of my cranium, then stick my dick into your quagmire of a clitoris. You're what would happen if a sperm whale mated with a Godzilla fish..


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Re: [[[[[[last draw thats it]]]]]]]]]

Postby Solace » Nov 15th, '09, 16:58

Do you have a disorder of some sort?

This was fucking garbage.
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Re: [[[[[[last draw thats it]]]]]]]]]

Postby Pte.Pelkey. » Nov 16th, '09, 08:10

I have plenty of disorders my friend.
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Postby gutawafang » Nov 16th, '09, 08:18

Pte.Pelkey. wrote:I have plenty of disorders my friend.

u seem proud of it, my friend.
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Re: [[[[[[last draw thats it]]]]]]]]]

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 16th, '09, 15:23

Hey bro really wasnt that good. Just simple rhymes and stuff. People are gonna give you a hard time because you kinda sound like your braggin about something thats not very good. Not trying to say your terrible or anything just that kinda chill out a bit man
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Re: [[[[[[last draw thats it]]]]]]]]]

Postby Solace » Nov 16th, '09, 23:58

Pte.Pelkey. wrote:I have plenty of disorders my friend.

Dope.
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