End

[BILI]

Ma` I need you by my side,cause I just feal that tonight I might die
I think its alright to cry,and I`m sorry when i acted impolite in July
Those gangsta acts in my raps were just a lie,and now I must try
To get things better,even pray to the sky,from today till goodbye
Pain inside me started to evolve,it was a problem that I couldn`t solve
It was fuckin my mind,I wanted to blow my head wit wooden revolver
I started to breathe deep,my heart beat started to accelerate fast
Before you die you get to see those flashbacks,so i tried to recreate past
I started to shake,so I asked my mom,is this how its supposed to be?
Ma` I really love you and you were the only one that was close to me
You were always wit me,from beginning and now even till the end
I gotta go now,its my time,but I want you to know that you`ll still be my friend
I saw tear on her face,her face had the shape like "please put the gun away"
Then I pulled the trigger and the last thing I saw was that she run away
A dead body just laid on the floor,and now it found a place to rest
Well now I`m goin to see the God,and finally embrace the best

[classthe_king]

By far your best piece. This is what im talkin about. Loved both these bars

I started to shake,so I asked my mom,is this how its supposed to be?
Ma` I really love you and you were the only one that was close to me

A dead body just laid on the floor,and now it found a place to rest
Well now I`m goin to see the God,and finally embrace the best

[Wic Kid]

As class said, by far you best peice.

[BILI]

thx a lot both of you,I put my heart into this one(I found out that I write better this kind of stuff then that gangsta shit )

[Fa-Q]

Wow good job BILI....I couldn't quite get the flow but its probably cause I'm incoherant...lol but good piece and at the end there was great imagery with her running away and you shooting

[mcZu]

Agree, your best piece to date. Keep improving bro, you're getting better and better.

[Yah-hah]

WOW that was some serious emotions homie. I think we all agree best piece from you so far. Loved the imagery.DOPE man good job

[BILI]

thx a lot everyone

[D'Leh]

your best piece by far cograts homie this is your best!!! anye feed on dream machine?

[BILI]

your best piece by far cograts homie this is your best!!! anye feed on dream machine?

thx man

[Xray]

Yeah man you're improving, I think you should keep what your doing for a month or two, and then start adding punchlines, more metaphors, multis, similes in your rhymes to step up even more. But this piece was good, you kept on subject and not everyone can do that. Keep it up.

[BILI]

Yeah man you're improving, I think you should keep what your doing for a month or two, and then start adding punchlines, more metaphors, multis, similes in your rhymes to step up even more. But this piece was good, you kept on subject and not everyone can do that. Keep it up.

thx a lot man for checkin this,and for the tips,Ima do exactly as you said

[MCyobi]

Dope emotional stuff