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Heroin

Postby D'Leh » Nov 18th, '09, 01:35

SNIIIIIIFFFFF...Thats one way to get me to yer brain
but the rush is so much better when I go in through yer vein
I hit the nervous system, away goes yer pain
Just a lil taste of me an youll never be the same
Ima make you feel great but without me yer sick
Bang another dose in yer arm, its just a lil prick
Already ya feel me, coursing through yer body quick
Weed used to be yer favorite, But I made you an addict
Labeled a junkie all because how much you love me
Youd steal from yer family, put nothin above me
Im yer God, yer lifeline, all that you need
Forget all yer friends, its their fault they ODd
Im the reason that you finally feel so accepted
Didnt fit in with them other kids, they always rejected
No one ever understands you, not even yer own parents
But Ill always be there...yer dear friend Heroin
Let me eat your pussy while I shave you!
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Re: Heroin

Postby Just Silver » Nov 18th, '09, 01:41

this shit was a clear ass story sometimes stories get cluttered with pauses and other techniques
but its straightforward :y:

sorta made me uncomfortable though i know ppl that have a history of that shit
:(
Great drop look forward for more in the future
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Re: Heroin

Postby Fa-Q » Nov 18th, '09, 01:56

I like how its from the drugs point of veiw....good song would be a sweet audio
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Re: Heroin

Postby D'Leh » Nov 18th, '09, 02:05

thanks man, for real!!!!
Let me eat your pussy while I shave you!
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Re: Heroin

Postby gutawafang » Nov 18th, '09, 02:51

This is crazy dope man. Putting yourself in the shoes of drugs is dope. Good job. :y:
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Re: Heroin

Postby Yah-hah » Nov 18th, '09, 15:12

Yeah man I used to be addicted to that shit. Good drop homie nice perspective on it, dope concept. :y:
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Re: Heroin

Postby eminemgirl1234 » Nov 18th, '09, 17:08

Um...the flow is kinda like eminem's in um, stay wide awake. Just sayin'. No need to get offensive.
"Sometimes I feel so alone,
I just don't know, feels like I been down this road before.
So lonely and cold, it's like something takes over me,
soon as I go home and close the door.
Kinda feels like Déjà Vu, I wanna get away from this place I do,
but I can't and I wont say I tried but I know that's a lie cuz I don't,
and why I just don't know...

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